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Lisa, you can break the rules, you just have to know them first.

But yes, I would suggest against taking too long to reveal Dulcie's fae-ness, because that gets annoying.
 

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Lisa, you can break the rules, you just have to know them first.

But yes, I would suggest against taking too long to reveal Dulcie's fae-ness, because that gets annoying.

That is what I was thinking.

Also, isn't it suggested you don't break the rules until you've written a lot?
 

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I like the idea of this. The Second World War is one of my favourite eras in history to study.

I was reading up about it, and then being inside Lazena (which is quite... Weird) gave me the idea to look up modeling in that time for a twist. :tongue
 

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But yes, I would suggest against taking too long to reveal Dulcie's fae-ness, because that gets annoying.
I take forever in Weeping to reveal what Meera and Lacrimosa are, but I did it on purpose. My readers thus far have not complained :D
 

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WW2 was very dramatic.

But...it could have been MORE DRAMATIC!

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Damn it, Germany, if you had actually built the Ratte then the war would have been over faster (as it's a useless piece of shit that would have cost more than countless other actually functional tanks combined) AND we'd have a tank so large that it was classified as a naval vessel.
 

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Extactly Tally.

In version four, it's Chapter Thirteen and Tristan still does not know.
 

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Or how about a mobile piece of artillery that can hit London?

From Normandy.

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It's the same tank chassie, but with a BIGGER GUN!
 

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I take forever in Weeping to reveal what Meera and Lacrimosa are, but I did it on purpose. My readers thus far have not complained :D

What are they?

Zoom: That is scary. And besides you were on our side. Tanks to target Germany please, thank you.
 

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Yes, he suspects by... Chapter Eleven. And the reader knows very early on.
 

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Sorry, the Germans were desperate, so they tried to make more wacky stuff.

The Americans did build a flying tank though!

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...it didn't work...
 

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Lisa, I repped you what they are. I know Tally knows what Meera is from critting my query, but I'm not sure if she knows what Lacrimosa is, and if she doesn't I wish to keep it that way until she reads.
 

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I am pretty sure I *know* what Lacrimosa is, because I can remember knowing, but that was before I knew what Weeping was about so I don't remember it.
 

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Well that works too, as far as I'm concerned, lol.

ETA: I always forget how tedious reorganizing my book cases really is.
 
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Lisa, I'm giving you an example of the 3 Act Structure for one of my novels. CMRH is my best structured novel. Probably because I have distinct internal (romance) and external conflicts that play off one another.

*snipped*
 
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