Teens Writing for Teens, the 5th

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Thalia

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the only reason I wear more clothes is either if I'm cold or if I feel fat. I always feel fat, but I still wear short shorts. and I wear a bit less in the way of deep necklines because I have barely any cleavage. :tongue
 

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Speaking of cold weather, it has been snowing here for a while.

Finishing my lyrics I started last week. :D
 

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I've been sleeping in Mum's room for the last two nights, because my room is WAY TOO COLD. D:

The main themes of TMB:

  • Depression
  • Lost love
  • Memories
  • Recovery
This is going to be the saddest book I've ever written, I think.
 

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Well, I made some progress in my WIP. It's getting to the end, at least, but I'm scared to think how bad the book really is. Oh well. :)
 

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HR - Just to look. I know it's really early since I haven't actually started going to college yet, but I want to have an idea of where I want to go after I finish my four years.

Plus, I did some research to see what I kind of law schools I can get in to with my major and it said people with an undergrad degrees in Sociology get accepted into both Cornell and the University of Pennsylvania, which is exciting because I really want to go to an Ivy League school.

It also means that I have to work extra hard when I go to college. hehe
 

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I have hips and no boobs :tongue

but yeah. Hmm. MAAH needs expanding, then.

Anyone want to beta for that? :)
 

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*puts hand up* XD

Glee version of Baby, It's Cold playing. :D It is snowing outside. XD
 

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I LOVE YOU GUYS.

I'm at a bit of a loss of where I should start with expanding, so could you rep me your email? (lisa, I already have yours) Again, thanks so much.
 

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I wish I knew what expansiveness of a project meant. Or interiority. (goes to dictionary)

Okay. A character's interiority is the internal stuff - their thoughts, their feelings, their mindset. I wonder if she thinks the viewpoint isn't close enough, like the reader is still being kept at a distance from Corwin. (If Corwin isn't the viewpoint character, she might mean that she can't understand Corwin well enough based on his actions, dialogue, etc, and we need to get a better sense of Corwin as a person.)

Her comments about the expansiveness (and the landscape) sounds like the main characters are compelling, but the rest of the story might not be quite there yet. I would look at the secondary cast and/or the world-building.
 

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I'm feeling fairly fragile at the moment, so everybody please be gentle. :tongue
 

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*swaddles para in bubble wrap and then gently hugs*

My little brother is kinda awesome. He came to Starbucks with me to write and asked to read my WIP. I sent it to him, and he's actually been reading it for the last 45 mins. He's eleven.
 

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Lisa - If by JB you mean Justin Bieber, then you are spot on. ANYTHING is better than him.

This. So much.

Having Glee come on my iTunes tonight so much (yay, shuffle!) has made me want to write a little.. i.e. until my head hurts again.

I don't know whether to go in the deep end or take it slow...
 
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