Beta Readers/Crit Requests

You guys rock.

But I sure wish you'd read it and get what I meant, even if that isn't what I wrote. I mean, what's wrong with you people? CAN'T YOU READ MINDS???



Seriously, thanks!

Shelley

*squeezes eyes tight*

*tries real hard*

Nope. No mind reading.

Dammit.

Shelley, make your mind more accessible, please.

Thanks in advance.

soapdish said:

*squeezes eyes tight*

*tries real hard*

Nope. No mind reading.

Dammit.

Shelley, make your mind more accessible, please.

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*looks around sheepishly*

*takes off tinfoil hat and pretends it was off the whole time*

*whistles*

Shelley

Ooh, if you all don't mind, I may start asking for betas for my short fiction. That's primarily what I write; whether it's because I just don't have the attention span to write novels, I don't know.

A word of warning that I'm new at this writing thing (In other words, I'm still in the "everything is unpublishable crap" phase that all aspiring writers go through). Hopefully with your help, I can at least escape "crap", if not "unpublishable".

Welcome, Emptyeye.

What sort of stuff do you write?

Thanks!

I write whatever strikes me fancy, to be honest. Some of the stuff I have in various stages of completion:
An 800-word fantasy piece that's a battle between two wizards.
A 2500-word...I guess it'd be a suspense/horror piece...where a man and a woman are restrained in a room whose purpose is not to cure insanity, but to cause it.
A 1000 word story that I intended to submit for Machine of Death 2 before I realized that taking another angle on it would be more interesting and make for a better story.

If anyone has anything short (Say under 5000 words) that they want me to beta/look at, that's cool too. I figure that can only help improve my writing that much faster.

Okay, if anybody has a short period of time to read over a story, I would appreciate a fresh pair of eyes.

The trick is that it needs to a very, very quick turnaround, because I'd like to send it within the next hour or two.

It's horror, but more creepy and not gory at all (not even any cursing, which was a challenge) at 2,925 words, so it shouldn't take long.

If anybody has the time, I'd appreciate it and am happy to reciprocate at any time. Thanks!

Shelley

Just saw this. Do you still need a look?

AnnieColleen said:

Just saw this. Do you still need a look?

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Thanks so much, Annie! But I think I've just about got her wrapped up. I appreciate the offer, though.



Shelley

I need someone to beta a short story. It's not speculative. In fact, I think it may be crap. Overly emotional, literary drivel, to be exact.

Fresh eyes would be welcomed. It's about 1550 words. Would be willing to trade betaing on anything of similar length. (Up to about 2k.) Can't do quick turnaround though, since my internet access is very limited. Send me a pm with email addy if interested.

I could use some help with a scene. It's a magic scene, and since I usually write all my magic off-screen, I'm really feeling like this sucks.

The whole story it almost 7k, so I don't want to throw that at anyone I really just need help with the scene. About 500 words. It's of a corpse being reanimated.

If you have experience writing or reading scenes of this nature--I'd be particularly interested on your take and if the scene is salvageable--or if I should just make it off-screen after all.

Will return the favor on something up to 2k if you need it.

soapdish said:

I could use some help with a scene. It's a magic scene, and since I usually write all my magic off-screen, I'm really feeling like this sucks.

The whole story it almost 7k, so I don't want to throw that at anyone I really just need help with the scene. About 500 words. It's of a corpse being reanimated.

If you have experience writing or reading scenes of this nature--I'd be particularly interested on your take and if the scene is salvageable--or if I should just make it off-screen after all.

Will return the favor on something up to 2k if you need it.

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Sounds interesting. Send me a pm, and I'd be more than happy to take a look at it for you(hopefully I'll be of some use).

Soapy: feel free to send it my way for a look-see. You have my e-mail address.

Thanks, guys!

Alex, I have had a couple people look at it and I'm going to make some tweaks based on what they've suggested. Then I'll send it to you for another look. You might see something that they didn't.

Look for something from me in the next couple of days.

Okay, could use some betas for my 800-word piece I intend to submit to 10Flash Quarterly. I guess it's sci-fi, though there's not a lot about it that couldn't take place in the present day with a few tweaks.

Because of the market, it would have to be as quickly as possible once I sent it to you. I'm willing to try and critique something of similar length, although I don't know how much help I'll be.

Emptyeye said:

Okay, could use some betas for my 800-word piece I intend to submit to 10Flash Quarterly. I guess it's sci-fi, though there's not a lot about it that couldn't take place in the present day with a few tweaks.

Because of the market, it would have to be as quickly as possible once I sent it to you. I'm willing to try and critique something of similar length, although I don't know how much help I'll be.

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I could get 800 words back to you tonight. How in depth a critique do you want? My email's nsktehATgmailDOTcom.

Cool, look for an e-mail from emptyeyeATemptyeyeDOTcom in the next 10 minutes or so.

Mainly, I'm a new writer. For this specific story, I'm mainly looking for a way to take out the various "he handed the notepad back to her"s and similar in the latter half of the story (You'll know what I mean when you read it). Be gentle please! If something sucks, feel free to tell me such, but also suggest a way I might make it not suck, if possible. This goes for anyone, by the way.

Do you have a specific file format you want, or is just pasting into the body of the e-mail okay?

Emptyeye said:

Cool, look for an e-mail from emptyeyeATemptyeyeDOTcom in the next 10 minutes or so.

Mainly, I'm a new writer. For this specific story, I'm mainly looking for a way to take out the various "he handed the notepad back to her"s and similar in the latter half of the story (You'll know what I mean when you read it). Be gentle please! If something sucks, feel free to tell me such, but also suggest a way I might make it not suck, if possible. This goes for anyone, by the way.

Do you have a specific file format you want, or is just pasting into the body of the e-mail okay?

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I'd prefer word of some kind, if possible. I can read .doc, .docx, rtf, whatever. And if you're around here, I doubt your writing sucks in any way. Just sayin'...

I'm bringing a story back after three R's and would really appreciate it if someone could take a look at it. It's a rather lonely story about a man floating through space. Right at around 1300 words.

I'd be more than happy to read something in return, as it would be very appreciated. You can PM me or just respond here, whichever.

I don't need a very in-depth critique. What works, what doesn't? That's really all I need. Also, advice on where to send it would be awesome!

I'd be happy to take a look. I'll pm you my email.

Feel free to send it to me, too. (Email's a post or two up.)

RED: Feel free to e-mail it to me: kingsgames at gmail dot com

I'm not an amazing critiquer, but I'll be happy to offer an opinion.

Hello there all, I've finally completed my revision of "Locked Away", and would absolutely love a critique. You can find it here if your interested, it is a tad long though clocking in at just over 4k. http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?p=6379152#post6379152