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Hi. I am working on a screenplay and I'm on an action scene with a man, his wife and son. I just want to know if there is an alternative way to describe what they're doing (basically running) without the constant use of "they" or "Nicholas, Sarah and John" or "Nicholas and his family" . Abbreviated and poorly written Example:
EXT. DARK ALLEY - DAY
Nicholas, Sarah and John run down the alley and break a corner. They pause as they spot three BAD GUYS.
The bad guys race after them.
Nicholas and his family turn and run back down the way they came.
They run across the street, dodging traffic and enter a
BUTCHER SHOP
and slip through one of the aisles.
The three bad guys enter and split up.
Nicholas leads Sarah and John to the back of the shop where they hide behind .....
Thanks for the help!
EXT. DARK ALLEY - DAY
Nicholas, Sarah and John run down the alley and break a corner. They pause as they spot three BAD GUYS.
The bad guys race after them.
Nicholas and his family turn and run back down the way they came.
They run across the street, dodging traffic and enter a
BUTCHER SHOP
and slip through one of the aisles.
The three bad guys enter and split up.
Nicholas leads Sarah and John to the back of the shop where they hide behind .....
Thanks for the help!