Hmmm...I liked the playfulness with the seriousness of the hook, myself. But still, a good reject, as these things go! I had to use an exclamation point, because she did!
Honestly, I have problems reading the Cupid's Literary Connection posts because...gee! So many points!!!
I have to sell one or both of my projects. My homestead is hemorrhaging money these days. Today was committing to tree work (that's where the real money today is, folks) and tracking down a roof leak (don't want to think what all that is is going to cost, especially the interior repairs). Ack, I was going to work on my NF, but stuff keeps happening.