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commasplicer

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Hi all,

I am struggling with a sentence and would appreciate some guidance. The sentence is:

Inside his imposing frame, there beat the kindest heart I've known.

I like the rhythm and feel of this sentence, but I'm not sure if it is sound grammatically.

Thanks.
 

Lady Ice

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I'd say:
'Inside his imposing frame, there beats/beat the kindest heart I've ever known' (beats if he still lives, beat if he's dead, or at least, 'dead' to the narrator) Maybe delete 'there'?
 
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What's the function of the word, "there?" To me the ending has less of a sing-songy feel to it without the word. Your mileage may vary, of course.
 
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