need criticism on the lyrics of my songs in the screenplay

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SONG 1
Oh! I miss you my love.
The symbol of it is dove.
Your magic on me can never fail.
Now I’ve ended up in jail.

I write this song for you.
Because I’m crazy about you.
We have such a strong bond.
Tougher than the mighty spy James Bond.

All I have is the dark room.
I try to fill passion in this room.
I will always love you.
Because I’m your beau.

I hope you’re not in trouble.
Even if you are, I wish it’d break like a bubble.
I wish you’d come to me unharmed.
Else your father will leave me unarmed.

You’re the costliest possession I have.
I’ll shower my love for every second I have.
So far I’ve cherished the moment I had.
I wish that things should never go this bad.
‘cause my life has become way too sad.

SONG 2

Oh! We meet,
Does it matter if I don’t greet,
I love you and I missed you,
Can I expect the same from you?

TOM
(sings)
Yes, you can and you should,
If I were you I definitely would,
My heart had gone to the boot,
Now it rises higher than my height in foot,

STEPHANIE
(sings)
Do you think I’ve been chastised?
That I have thought of others,
And behaved in ways like I was mesmerized,
Does all this have any bothers?

TOM
(sings)
I’m a man, I’m flawed, insecure,
But now that I have you I’m cured,
By the look in your eyes I can say,
That your heart has only knows to come my way.

STEPHANIE
(sings)
I can’t tell you the relief I feel,
As I can’t believe it is for real,
Now let’s move to the place we call home,
And have a moment that we can own,

SONG 3

Oh! It’s happening.
In the strangest of the ways.
A movie with action and men singing
The hero had to look out for the bays.

The stronger the villain,
The stronger the story,
These are efforts of the villain,
Who wants nothing but movie glory.

He’ll hold all of you at gun point
And try to beat home his point
There is nothing in the world that can stop him
His name will get registered in the credits of the film

All that he wants he’ll have it done
But then he’s not the only one.
There is trouble in this paradise.
His relationship with his foe is as cold as ice.

But then the pother baddie is not so easy
As he’ll always say today weather will be breezy
So all that you do is watch them fight
Hold on to your seat belts it’s gonna be very tight.

SONG 4

There are beats that happen in my heart
They say that I need to be a brat.
They al can have me for money.
I can call anyone my honey

It feels food when so many people look at me.
I should enjoy the look in their eyes for me.
I don’t have a place to call home.
I can make or wreck any man’s home.


Someday I plan to have a man for myself
After all I’m a bit centered self.
I need to shower attention
And then have someone reciprocate the same attention.

I even think of having children.
Littered around me
They’ll never be a burden
And I’d love them and hold unto me.

I was told by an astrologer to marry late
And I hate to make him or myself wait
In his car or in the bar
Till then I’ll be just a porn star.

SONG 5

It’s a poison or a sword.
I’d rather make myself a whore.
These are the two important men in my life.
To one I’m daughter and to other a wife.

Father, see where you brought us
With so much of your fuss
Had you been easy on my love
Then this day wouldn’t come I can vow.

And you claim to be the man in love with me.
And this is what you let happen to me.
You made a promise to protect me
But you stand helpless and watch me.

Is this what I have to go through?
To be where I have to see you two
See as free birds to take me high and fly.
And then go all around in the sky

I’m still counting and hoping.
That you’ll do all that is needed for saving
Myself from the powers that have cast spells of their brutality
And take me to the world where I can see only hostility.


SONG 6

Happy endings, happy endings are all that we need.
Conflict is solved, story is over, nothing more to see.
It is all of our work for display
This was just a day of cat and mouse at play

That’s all the show we got for you tonight
Hope we got all the laughs at the spots right.
This is the power that a writer has
After he’s gone in a party everybody asks who he was

From blank page in a computer
To the reel in the projector
So many people slog it out
Just like the baby in the womb want to get out.

Then we go tot distributor and ask them to buy.
Tell’em we’ve made an experiment don’t shy,
They say from whose pocket is the money gonna come
We say from yours don’t be dumb.

Then its time to paste posters all over the city
Let the almighty audience know we’re in the city.
They come and watch the movie
Hope they find it real glory

Let’s call it a wrap now.

REGARDS,
ACE.INC1