One marvelous person (Hi, Halcyon!) has already offered to go through my 65,000 science fiction novel(la), but I’m hoping that one or two other readers might also be willing to take it for a spin, if that's not being greedy?
It’s set in a skewed future where librarians are paid only slightly less than junior high school teachers, but have better weaponry, the Press Corps is wired for far more than sound, and laser-equipped Security Doors provide the illusion of safety. I posted my first chapter in Share Your Work (under "The First Chapter of my $#%$ Fourth Draft") if you’d like to take a look first (please note that I've since edited my MS to incorporate some of the suggestions I received on it, but this version should give you a general gist ).
Basically, I need to know if the plot holds together and what makes sense, considering the premise and the settings, and what . . . doesn’t. And also if there are any major goofs\glaring errors or plot holes or missing pieces, or just places where you’re wondering what prescription meds I might have been taking at the time (and whether you'd suggest refills or rehab).
Constructive criticism about my work doesn’t bother me as long as I understand the reasons behind it--I’m here to learn, not to feed the ego ROFL. But if the final verdict is that it stinks on ice, I’d really appreciate gentler wording.
I will be glad to reciprocate in any genre.
It’s set in a skewed future where librarians are paid only slightly less than junior high school teachers, but have better weaponry, the Press Corps is wired for far more than sound, and laser-equipped Security Doors provide the illusion of safety. I posted my first chapter in Share Your Work (under "The First Chapter of my $#%$ Fourth Draft") if you’d like to take a look first (please note that I've since edited my MS to incorporate some of the suggestions I received on it, but this version should give you a general gist ).
Basically, I need to know if the plot holds together and what makes sense, considering the premise and the settings, and what . . . doesn’t. And also if there are any major goofs\glaring errors or plot holes or missing pieces, or just places where you’re wondering what prescription meds I might have been taking at the time (and whether you'd suggest refills or rehab).
Constructive criticism about my work doesn’t bother me as long as I understand the reasons behind it--I’m here to learn, not to feed the ego ROFL. But if the final verdict is that it stinks on ice, I’d really appreciate gentler wording.
I will be glad to reciprocate in any genre.
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