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16129. Haha. I wouldn't do that. I'll bet she's grumpy when someone wakes her up.
 
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16136-Harry, what age group are you targeting with your book? YA, MG? You need to go through your story and put spaces between each different dialogue. If a new person is speaking, there should be a space there. It's still difficult to read.
 
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16137- I read it, but it's too late to give a good crit right now, I have to get up at six in the morning and unload a truck. I'll post a crit either tomorrow night or the next. :)
 

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I'll look forward to reading your valued critique tomorrow morning.
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16140 *gets the tea on*
 
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16,141. *has a rummage around for some nice biscuits*
 
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16142 *hides the nice biscuits from Rob*
 
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Really must make the kids' breakfast soon!
 
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16146 I've just had me some croissants. Wouldn't advise them for kids though - crumbs everywhere.
 
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16,147. *weeps piteously in the hope that nice biscuits will be provided*
 
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We have croissants in bed for birthdays, Jilly...and always have to change the sheets afterwards :D

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16,149. *inspects rich tea biscuits* NOM NOM NOM. Fanks.
 
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16150 *brings out the choccie biscuits because we're halfway to a hundred*
 
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