Robj's reconstruction illustrates a major reason for commaitis: mis-ordered clauses. The suggested correction demonstrates one of the best ways to cure it.
Yes--I like the RichardB's first example. The fragment issue can be adjusted. Too many commas can make a sentence cumbersome, even when they are used correctly.
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