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I've heard of it, MR. Are they doing one this year?
Negatory. Tell me more.
Is it about child birth by chance?
how is everyone?
I'm more worried that it'll be classed as amateur and not worth fixing. It's the first thing I've ever finished (asides from a short story for college) .
I'm busy getting paid to do what I love. It feels good. How about you?
“Evy wait!” Matty cried and pulled me back. Bumping back into his chest my heart sped up.
Everything seemed to freeze in place, as his head lowered down to mine. I knew what was happening, I just couldn’t… I couldn’t believe it. His lips touched mine and nothing felt so right to be before. Like a surge of electricity, every inch of me suddenly felt alive yet numb. All this time and finally I got to kiss him. My arms wrapped around his neck, his hand held my waist. Although he’d held me there a million times before this time felt different, felt right. The awkwardness, the nervousness, it all died away. As he pulled me in closer to him, our lips refusing to separate, I knew it now. The feelings had never been one way. He loved me too. And this right here, this was the first kiss I was always meant to have.
Matty finally separated himself from me and we stood there silently. All I could do was giggle. The nervousness had return. What if I sucked as a kisser… wouldn’t that change his feelings? Oh shit I really screwed this up. We weren’t even dating and I already turned him off of me! Shit! I looked up at him the anxiety killing me. I didn’t know what to say, what do you say after a kiss? Shit, they never showed that in the movies. In the Mummy Evy and Rick just ride off on the back of a camel into the sunlight! Fuck! Why wasn’t he talking. He never shut the hell up any other time!
Ally - I like it. It's rough but it's definitely a good scene. With a few revisions it can be an even better scene.