Haikuicide

[Teena]

in the forest gloom
gently rocks a cradleboard
red-skinned mother croons

[Steppe]

I like your haiku Teena, but what is a "cradleboard" ?

Not much at haiku. I call them just short poems.
Here's an example-

aircraft carrier
docked
seagulls in for repairs

[Teena]

I like your haiku Teena, but what is a "cradleboard" ?

Not much at haiku. I call them just short poems.
Here's an example-

aircraft carrier
docked
seagulls in for repairs

Thanks. Cradleboard = woven, Native American baby carrier. Infant is wrapped tightly (swaddled) & carried on the mother's back (by straps like a modern backpack) or by a single strap across her forehead so her hands are free.

Haiku are defined as 3 lines: 5 syllables, 7 syllables, 5 syllables and in their pure form are about nature. However, poets take poetic license. ;) Another:

Swift and silent feet
Native warrior hunts alone
Red-tailed deer his prey

BTW - your 'short poem' above is perfect for "monotone monostitch" poetry game -- kind of one-liners -- join in and share more!!

[emeraldcite]

what have you hidden
behind your back, out of view?
I am out of touch.

When she shows me the
flower, broken at the stem,
my eyes burn with tears.

"This is what you've done
to me," she says, the flower
falling to the ground.

[Teena]

sunlit beauty dreams
plaiting flowers in her braids
moccasins at rest

lilting voice of flute
serenades the maiden fair
singing songs of love

[Godfather]

paranoia's rough
when you got a gun in your
back pocket


paranoia's tough
when you got a gun
stapled to your ass

[Teena]

rivers of moonlight
pour through my window in a
night-stream of silver

[dahmnait]

trees stand majestic
with early morning bird song
light mist fills spring sky

[kdnxdr]

light mist fills spring sky
sullen winter turns away
jealous for the fall

[onestepp]

Jealous for the fall
blackhearted envious flew
leaflet turned anew

[P.H.Delarran]

;) I think we're confusing this with the haiku chain thread

[kdnxdr]

my apologies
i'm deliriously tired
taking care of mom

[P.H.Delarran]

tender hands caress
daughter returns mother's care
laborless, this love

[kdnxdr]

laborless, this love -
effortlessly working grace,
sustained by God's hand

[P.H.Delarran]

early spring blossoms
tight buds protect tender seeds
shell game for Autumn

[Hoodimann]

Yes, it is always amusing to watch writers do the counting game, rather than the poetry game. A haiku should be a poem which is powerful even with its short delivery. Remember, Bruce Lee could incapacitate someone with his one-inch punch! Lol.

Just getting the count
to the right number of beats
is never enough. <-----I do not consider that a haiku, regardless of syllable count, and there sure as hell is not anything poetic about it! Lol.

Here's my haiku, though.

She dresses in sprays
of frozen petals; takes turns
with her rusted cage.

[kdnxdr]

white locks lie quiet
tossed in dreams of youth long spent
the sun has settled

[kdnxdr]

five, seven, five; count
exhaling your poetry -
inhale what you need