Haikuicide

[Pat~]

unleashed emotion
in tight, little verse is like
dancing on a dime

[Godfather]

my first ever haiku

i love you, martha
to the point of no return
won't you love me too?

[JAlpha]

Love bug bites again :heart:
lucky Martha and us too
graced with first haiku

[emeraldcite]

A bug bites Haiku.
She sneezes, coughs, and burns up.
Here comes Tamiflu

[poetinahat]

ancient, dusky smell
stipple-smooth texture and coolth
fades to dignity

[D.J.]

Dogs stay near, on guard;
can they hear over their snores?
Proof, pizza arrived!

[Godfather]

insignifigant
guard dogs, with women near too,
Don't like them or you

[Pat~]

fur on neck is raised
malevolent smell invades
my haiku haven

[D.J.]

insignifigant
guard dogs, with women near too,
Don't like them or you

Can you explain this?
I would like to know intent.
Can you fill us in?

(Thanks)

[Zonk]

I see you appear
and vanish; haunting my dreams
do I appear in...


:D:D:D

[poetinahat]

I do not know you.
Saw you wrote "Martha Haiku."
Gave you a good rep.

Why did you attack?
You must be miserable.
I'm sorry you hurt.

(Oh, and if you want to correct your typo, it's..."insignificant." Take care.)
Sticking my oar in:
I read it as the guard dogs
who dislike both sides....

[L M Ashton]

Take away curry
Chicken, veggies, and red rice
No cooking for me!

[L M Ashton]

Writer's block be gone!
You're not allowed here no more!
Have exorcised you!

[Pat~]

Sticking my oar in:
I read it as the guard dogs
who dislike both sides....

insightful poet's
oar smooths turbulent waters
rocking haiku boat

[Pat~]

he whose hand extends
gift of benefit of doubt
this is friend indeed

[poetinahat]

insightful poet's
oar smooths turbulent waters
rocking haiku boat
yet another thought:
is it the women hating
both dogs and reader?

The haikus' sequence
does raise disturbing context.
Hope there's no ill meant.

[D.J.]

Poet, if you're right
Apologies to OP.
Response would be nice.

[D.J.]

Dark day full of cheer;
lightly laden sky should know-
clouds are welcome here.

[D.J.]

Happiness abounds;
desire it enough to search -
believe, reach, grasp, live...

[Godfather]

the women and dogs
are her unsubstantial guard
they all changed my mind.

do you understand?
sorry i made it unclear
my apologies.

[Pat~]

window o'er the wing
frames the earthen quilt below
upon which we play

ribbon roads connect
velvet squares of farmer's fields
to chenille forests

[JAlpha]

one second launches
minutes, hours, days and months
as the years sail by

[D.J.]

the women and dogs
are her unsubstantial guard
they all changed my mind.

do you understand?
sorry i made it unclear
my apologies.

Thank you, but it's I
who apologize to you!
Right, they are lapdogs! :)

[Perihelion]

toe-jam in morning
all day shoes I wear
toe-jam at night

[Perihelion]

up at 3 a.m.
hang over from loooong party
never again

[Pat~]

the women and dogs
are her unsubstantial guard
they all changed my mind.

do you understand?
sorry i made it unclear
my apologies.

i am sorry, too
misinterpreted your poem
judged too hastily :Ssh:

hope you'll post again
really liked haiku debut
welcome to the thread

[L M Ashton]

Short story editing
Not even my own - husband's
Bad punctuation.

[kdnxdr]

haiku to you
how do you do
I love it

[kdnxdr]

birds chirping
coffee smelll
stretch

[kdnxdr]

silver sun
window peep
work calls

[kdnxdr]

night's words
spoken rash
slowly the day moves

[kdnxdr]

love seeks the day
cool shadows pass
writing helps

[kdnxdr]

clicking is a soothing sound
fingers dance
a round

[D.J.]

Welcome KDN...
your question of Haiku how,
done in syllables.

First line starts with five
second, seven syllables
then end it with five.

When I first came here,
they were all so kind to me
and taught me Haiku.

I like your thoughts though
You can reorganize them
if you want - Welcome!

[D.J.]

Sunday morn of calm
Good coffee shared with husband
Study done jointly.

How about sharing?
How do you begin Sundays?
What's your fav week day?

[kdnxdr]

Hi DJ,

Thank you for the kind welcome. I have been recently reading about haiku and I've discovered that the 5/7/5 format is, in fact, not true of haiku's. I went to the American Haiku Association and spoke to some people there. There are quite a few criteria that are incorporated into traditional haiku. I don't know if I remember them all. One is that there should be some indication of season, in some way. Secondly that it is more a subjective observation of something rather than me describing or attributing characteristics to what I am speaking about. Also, two of the lines are to be directly related and the third line is a type of relation but removed so that the reader "gets" the connection, like an ephiany moment, an "aha". also, it's not that it should be 5/7/5, it can be but some say not more than 17 syllables or, more so, something that can be said "in one breath", it's really not so specific. Anyway, I'm am such a newbiehead. I was just zipping off things as they were popping in my head. Thank you for the feedback. I will look for the addresses of some really cool haiku sites that I found, the people were so nice to me there to explain. Also, there is a meeting of the American Hiaku Society in the Ozarks in the spring and it's only $35.00 to participate. It's a beautiful area and they will have speakers, classes and all kinds of poets that are in love with haikus.

[poetinahat]

Hi, kdnxdr! (btw... clever name!)

Thanks for the post.... I'd heard that before, and someone else mentioned that previously on the thread, but a request for further details went unanswered.

I'd wondered how the syllable constraint for a format invented in Japanese was meant to translate into English. I find the 5/7/5 format helps me -- a framework always does. Maybe one day I'll get up the courage to drop the limits and let fly.

Of course, I don't really exist except for here.

See you further down the thread!

[kdnxdr]

hey ptnaht,

thanks for the welcome, sorry about unanswered post. "kid" works if all the consonants get in the way.

I've gotten brave and tried some on a serious, nothing but, haiku website. I thought they might laugh me off. But, the people were very nice to me. I like haiku's for the challenge.

Right not, I can't seem to muster up a poem, I went to a slammy kind of thing and when I hear what people are doing with the spoken word and how incredible, I feel like a poet wimp. I'm just in a writing crisis. I have to write. It's just in me. But, I want what I write to connect with someone "out there", to add something constructive to the collective consciousness of poetry and writing.

I just launched off on my first every script. I've got a story line going that I am so enjoying writing but, lol, who knows if anyone would ever enjoy to read it and "get" what it is that I'm talking about. Sad, sad, writer's plight. waaaaaaaaaa. Okay, pity party over.

I hope someday, I get the hang of query/submission. I took the pledge and am trying to find a way to submit some poetry and I have a short story about a real, daytime UFO encounter that I and my children experienced. An, up close and personal event. Just don't know where to submit.

Okay..........I'm rambling.

[poetinahat]

five-seven-five form
helps poets who crave structure
I'm one of them (!)

[D.J.]

Hi DJ,

Thank you for the kind welcome. I have been recently reading about haiku and I've discovered that the 5/7/5 format is, in fact, not true of haiku's. I went to the American Haiku Association and spoke to some people there. There are quite a few criteria that are incorporated into traditional haiku. I don't know if I remember them all. One is that there should be some indication of season, in some way. Secondly that it is more a subjective observation of something rather than me describing or attributing characteristics to what I am speaking about. Also, two of the lines are to be directly related and the third line is a type of relation but removed so that the reader "gets" the connection, like an ephiany moment, an "aha". also, it's not that it should be 5/7/5, it can be but some say not more than 17 syllables or, more so, something that can be said "in one breath", it's really not so specific. Anyway, I'm am such a newbiehead. I was just zipping off things as they were popping in my head. Thank you for the feedback. I will look for the addresses of some really cool haiku sites that I found, the people were so nice to me there to explain. Also, there is a meeting of the American Hiaku Society in the Ozarks in the spring and it's only $35.00 to participate. It's a beautiful area and they will have speakers, classes and all kinds of poets that are in love with haikus.

Thanks! I'm a relative newbie and understood it was best to stick with the 5-7-5. There are times when it can vary, but I didn't really bother trying to grasp it. LOL! Since I just "doodle" with it anyway, I just stay with that format. BUT someday, maybe I'll get more indepth and now thanks to you, I know how to proceed.

[Pat~]

welcome kdnxdr
thanks for sharing haiku facts
need refresher course

[Pat~]

inquiring minds want
to know riddle of poet's
avatar title...

[Pat~]

riddle has been solved
maybe there could be a club
(i could collect, too!)

[Zonk]

a long white cold page
forgotten hot blazing words
the fear of writing
:D:D:D

[Godfather]

an artist, claude monet,
made up impressionism
one fine summers day.






irrelevant post
i splash on haikuicide,
martha won't be pleased.

[D.J.]

inquiring minds want
to know riddle of poet's
avatar title...

(Ditto that!)

[JAlpha]

hey ptnaht,

thanks for the welcome, sorry about unanswered post. "kid" works if all the consonants get in the way.

I've gotten brave and tried some on a serious, nothing but, haiku website. I thought they might laugh me off. But, the people were very nice to me. I like haiku's for the challenge.

Right not, I can't seem to muster up a poem, I went to a slammy kind of thing and when I hear what people are doing with the spoken word and how incredible, I feel like a poet wimp. I'm just in a writing crisis. I have to write. It's just in me. But, I want what I write to connect with someone "out there", to add something constructive to the collective consciousness of poetry and writing.

I just launched off on my first every script. I've got a story line going that I am so enjoying writing but, lol, who knows if anyone would ever enjoy to read it and "get" what it is that I'm talking about. Sad, sad, writer's plight. waaaaaaaaaa. Okay, pity party over.

I hope someday, I get the hang of query/submission. I took the pledge and am trying to find a way to submit some poetry and I have a short story about a real, daytime UFO encounter that I and my children experienced. An, up close and personal event. Just don't know where to submit.

Okay..........I'm rambling.

"haikuicide" rules
a one-of-a-kind genre
subject to our whims

[JAlpha]

an artist, claude monet, (5) :)
made up impressionism (7)
one fine summers day. (5)


......

[poetinahat]

old dog, new trick:
uneasy pair at first,
easier with time

(okay *whew* there's one that doesn't fit 5-7-5. So hard to fight the impulse, and I still think it would've done well in the 'standard'. But must try to learn!)

[poetinahat]

will a child prefer
a pile of long metal bars
or a jungle gym?

[kdnxdr]

red satin
heart of chocolate
snuggling near the fire

[Godfather]

blues, folk, rock, thats me.
art, poetry, thats my mind.
I, artistically.


a girl hides her tears,
or at least she tries, that girl.
I shall calm her fears.

[Godfather]

Mississippi blues,
Blow so black through the cracks,
Then to these Haikus



Boy was petrified,
I saved his life through my art,
thats Haikuicide.



Manself is honour,
to protect his progeny
and his self-respect.



Watch out my readers,
for this aint Haikuicide,
no man, its virtue.



Thank you very much,
my ladies and gentlemen,
now, enjoy your night.

[Jeneral]

Editing third draft.
Thank God for double-spacing
Places for red marks.

[Pat~]

prolific poets

persistently perpetrate

petite poetry

[Pat~]

writers wearily
wrestle with worrisome words
when wordsmithing well

[poetinahat]

You, my friend from here
And she, my friend from elsewhere:
I love a small world

[Godfather]

pugnacious pagans
and pilfering prostitutes,
write prolific poems.

[Jo]

stark sliver of light
tickles the dark horizon
bicephalous orb

[Beyondian]

(bicephalus? That sounds wonderful even if I don't know what it means)
Air thick on my face
windows flung wide for breeze
A muggy cocoon

[Beyondian]

A new work year dawns
Crouching like a fierce tiger
Waiting to ambush

Holidays went fast
Trickling through my hands, sand-like
So few moments left

[Jo]

(bicephalus? That sounds wonderful even if I don't know what it means)

Hehe! Thankyou!

For those of you in the dark; bicephalous adjective: resembling the new moon in shape. (Last night's setting moon caught my eye.) I was playing around with that last line - a crescent shaped ball (orb).

ETA: Bicephalous can also mean: adj. zoology having two heads. (Not the meaning I was using in the haiku!)

[JAlpha]

Try your hand at a movie haiku http://www.script-o-rama.com/haiku2.shtml
Here's my submission . . .

Brokeback Mountain

ranch hand and cowboy
forge romantic partnership
while prodding cattle

http://photobucket.com/albums/c34/JAlpha/th_AF1Cow11.gif (http://photobucket.com/albums/c34/JAlpha/?action=view&current=AF1Cow11.gif)

[Godfather]

deerhunter:

three friends, hunters all
fly away to vietnam
two live, but not quite.

[DTKelly]

Here's my epic Haiku.... Written last year.

Writer’s Cramp

I sit at my desk
The computer screen is blank
My coffee cup bare.

Nothing in my head
My fingers tap nervously
Deadline coming fast.

I shuffle papers
I scramble for ideas
Nothing is coming.

More coffee, a must
Caffeine reinvigorates
Synapses kick in.

I put my head down
To let ideas seep in
The keyboard is cold.

*

Story must be smart
Readers also like witty
Try to avoid ‘cute.’

An idea comes
About a boy and his dog
Mishaps aplenty.

I begin to type
My head filled with images
The boy and dog play.

Must be funny, yes
Tell myself this is the best
Truly inspired.

Page after page scroll
Fingers fly across dull keys
Make vivid pictures.

Characters breathe life
Scenery explodes color
Every word perfect.

Story writes itself
Editing to be a breeze
Pushcart here I come.

*

I hear a soft noise
My wife is standing behind
Taps me on the arm.

‘Don’t bother me now
Can’t you see I’m on a roll
If I stop it’s lost.

‘Key points must be made
Before my system shuts down
I have a deadline.’

Tapping me again
‘I’m almost done with this page’
Control-S to save.

‘You should go to bed’
I raise my head off the keys
Ten pages of ‘b’.

[Godfather]

a way with the words
metaphor and all that stuff
lets all be poets

[Pat~]

shade of cloud by day

light of fire by night

ever present Love

[Pat~]

neglected ivy
droops like withered hand of man
on the bed nearby

[JAlpha]

. ..
.
.

can you hear the pin
clicking onto the bottom
of a quiet thread




http://www.fotosearch.com/thumb/ICL/ICL118/STY_195.jpg

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[Pat~]

i blinked my eyes and
suddenly you're all grown up
pulling back from me

your stony face breaks
into dimpled, broad grin and
you are five again

[Pat~]

panoramic view

eternity is the scope

that sharpens vision

[oneovu]

I should go away
But this black hole is cozy
So maybe I’ll stay

[poetinahat]

haikus decorate
the doughnut of my mind like
hundreds and thousands

[dahmnait]

Am I wasting time
To write past one hundred posts
Here the boards addict

[D.J.]

He stroked her mussed hair,
spoke of old beauty still young -
death came, loved remained.

[Pat~]

Giggling she retorts,
fiercely brushing red-gold mane;
she blazes softly.

[dahmnait]

Your little hands touch
like gentle fairy kisses
my heart with your love

[Pat~]

scribe sharpens her tools
as cold fingers lace up for
morning exercise

smooth surface awaits
scripting of her thoughts while she
strokes to lyric song

[Godfather]

no-good know-it-all
tells me of my wrongs, her rights.
it cant be reversed.

[JAlpha]

five hundred yen-eroo's
for your fab winning haiku
lots of green tea too

http://www.itoen.co.jp/new-haiku/index_e.html

Also, take a peak
an interesting premise
awaits your comment

http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=27036

[Pat~]

thank you, JAlpha
I've entered my haiku and
wait with bated breath ;)

[poetinahat]

Pat anticipates
contest response; that, or else
she's been eating worms.

[Beyondian]

A busy day ends
And night crawls by leglessly
Still and slow as death

[DTKelly]

Off to work I go
Last day working this sh* job
I can't wait for 3.

[Beyondian]

Restless writer's urge
Wakes my heart, stirs, and calls to
me to answer it

The powerful cry
intoxicates my mind and
blood, unnerving me

Until all I do
Is stare at pictures of my
brain, and sigh for words

Wishing the impulse
Of my heart were sated and
calm, less persistant

Yet a corner of
my mind delights in the glad power
and drinks deeply still

Of the burning fount
of heady inspiration
flowng here, in me...

[Jo]

tender is my heart
brimming with requited love
this Valentine's Day

[poetinahat]

She understands me
Yet she loves me as I am
O, thou lucky man.

[kdnxdr]

Thank you for the info on the Haiku contest. I entered 6!

[Pat~]

valentine's is past
yet love acts in the present
hopes in the future

[D.J.]

Business trip called -
hid fudge and poem in bag;
hubby was surprised!

[Pat~]

Winter's dying gasp;
resolute buds shiver in
thin green windbreakers.

[Beyondian]

Long Nights and Days pass
Leaving weariness behind
Rest Drops on me now

[Pat~]

wave-borne bottle breaks
"I don't know if I love you"
reads the note inside

[Dawno]

Hi, Haikuiciders! You may have noticed the announcement about TIO that Jenna posted.

I'm going to be moving this thread over to the Poetry forum soon. I'll leave a referral here, but I believe you'll like your new home - it's the right place to be :)

[poetinahat]

Probably better
than 'writing exercises
and word games'... right, gang?

[Pat~]

i look at my hands
and wonder if they ever
will move as His did

[Jo]

perpetual words
haunt creative writer's mind
playtime of the muse

[dahmnait]

under shade poignant
gold shower spirals downward
a textured carpet

[Pat~]

words play in my mind
their game of freeze tag while my
muse plays hide 'n seek

[kdnxdr]

dust is in their mouths
water is so far away
the camera clicks

[kdnxdr]

water took away
the wind blew to who knows where
earth blankets them all

[poetinahat]

a cricket clicking
skitters swiftly across grass
waving antennae

[Beyondian]

After a long day
The warming wine of repose
Takes over my limbs

[Beyondian]

Memories skitter
Around the edge of my brain
white walls flashing by

A hospital stay
Branded heavily on my
brain, leaving fragments

Of jarring feelings
and sensations: sheets, nurses,
needles, long dark nights

Though three months past now
still the thoughts linger, stubborn
appearing sometimes

unnerving my heart
and reminding me strangely
of alien times...

(I had a corrective ((orthodontic)) jaw operation in December. I'm all better now, but the feelings are still hanging around in my brain. On the positive side - the operation and recuperation weren't nearly as bad as I had thought...)

[Cassie88]

Henry, three years old
Death, unimaginable
He laughed all the time

[JAlpha]

Henry, three years old
Death, unimaginable
He laughed all the time

So much emotion
now confined in so few words
of unspoken pain

[poetinahat]

a sobering truth:
we are all the dying type
as long as we live

[Godfather]

im scared of something
but nothing fills the damn void
man, im paranoid.

[DebbieOhi]

A plethora of
forum haikus overwhelms
this humble newbie!

[JAlpha]

A plethora of
forum haikus overwhelms
this humble newbie!

Welcome to our prime
thread of shared Real Estate
we'll leave a light on :)

[Pat~]

Glad you're here, Debbie!
Haiku is like chocolate;
Best savored slowly.

[Godfather]

post-isolation
from rhyming poetry world.
my songwritings back.

[Pat~]

fishing for the bait
that will lure reluctant muse
back into my head

a fair-weather friend
undependable at best
flighty as a child

[Pat~]

pansies dance and sway
latent winter rains incite
drunken ecstasy

[JAlpha]

pansies dance and sway
latent winter rains incite
drunken ecstasy

Rain, but no pansies http://photobucket.com/albums/c34/JAlpha/th_AF2Flowers2d.gif (http://photobucket.com/albums/c34/JAlpha/?action=view&current=AF2Flowers2d.gif)
too lazy to plant this year
my latent regrets

[Ganesha]

Henry, three years old
Death, unimaginable
He laughed all the time

death steals laughter-we
are downcast from such a loss
heaven holds him now

[brokenfingers]

winter's heavy grip
can always be loosened by
friends, laughter and sun.

[poetinahat]

Two size-three sneakers
lying akimbo by the couch
the bath is running

[Ganesha]

Two size-three sneakers
lying akimbo by the couch
the bath is running

water aqua blue
laps and collapses into black
waiting now for you

[poetinahat]

smug and contented,
recline becoming collapse:
once hunter, now prey.

[Ganesha]

smug and contented,
recline becoming collapse:
once hunter, now prey.

White Rabbit

nervous, half ready
prey jumps away from hunter;
follow tracks down whole

[poetinahat]

The thief draws his blade
even as the wealthy man
fondles his wallet

[Ganesha]

cut purse steals away
black crows are rich in laughter;
money is soon spent

[robeiae]

I agreed to post
one more haiku at the most
for our lovely host

Rob :)

[JAlpha]

I agreed to post
one more haiku at the most
for our lovely host

Rob http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/images/smilies/smile.gif

flattery is nice http://photobucket.com/albums/c34/JAlpha/th_shimmy.gif (http://photobucket.com/albums/c34/JAlpha/?action=view&current=shimmy.gif)
but, I am high maintenance
I always want more

[Pat~]

isolation is
a soothing balm for scorched hearts;
detachment's sure cure

[poetinahat]

fragments of rubble
might and grandeur's pale echoes
Foro Romano

[robeiae]

ethics cause trouble
when you live with the geckos
and signs say "bano"

Rob :)

[poetinahat]

slap up some drivel
of seventeen syllables
and call it haiku

[robeiae]

please do not quibble
with my choice of syllables
I am count Dooku

[poetinahat]

i am robeiae
wait: i am not robeiae
you are robeiae!

[robeiae]

what the world needs now
is some of that love sweet love
put that in your pipe...

[poetinahat]

Yours is wise counsel,
Emperor of Wyoming.
Pass that pipe this way.

[robeiae]

weary of the weight
my brow longs to pass the crown
but honour yields not

[poetinahat]

heavy hangs the head
that weareth the jester's cap
before a tough crowd

[robeiae]

look at my banjo
or arrow through the head gag
sing King Tut with me

[Ganesha]

frost etches lacy
fingers, toes chilled to the bone
god help the homeless

[Ganesha]

sucking on aged grapes
teeth stained maroon- I am drunk
on mind sobering thoughts

[poetinahat]

the memory of
a long-drawn nicotine rush
is a fond romance

[Ganesha]

blue smoke curled around
winding a long dragon tail
butts on the sidewalk

[robeiae]

kind thought for Jenna
she bears a heavy burden
shielding those once torn

[Ganesha]

frozen white pane
powder blue sky-brilliant sun
crows silently cry

[poetinahat]

foul, rancorous bile
spat on paper, so released:
written and unsent

[Ganesha]

foul, rancorous bile
spat on paper, so released:
written and unsent

scented paper-she
wrote to him on bended knee
tucked away with cent

[poetinahat]

I look past your face
and pretend we've never met
too late for 'sorry'

[Ganesha]

no mercy f*ck, me
I am twisting on flag pole;
patriots gather

:flag:

[Pat~]

shopping at the mall
left my purchases unbought
when they played our song

[Ganesha]

sweet melody soothes me
I am trancing, romancing
my goods abandoned

[kdnxdr]

panoramic view
pedestrian wonders
connect all the dots

[Ganesha]

picking up dots, she
collects all the dashes too
then stacks them neatly

[rich]

Feed a man a fish,

It’s one meal. Teach him to fish

He’ll mooch your tackle.

[D.J.]

Warm weather returns
it finds a welcoming crowd
iris, tulips, me...

[D.J.]

Spring into action
garden ground ready to plant
two more weeks plants wait

[D.J.]

Peaking cautiously
from broken ground, straightened necks,
parade upward crowns.

[Ganesha]

Springs into my thoughts

mommy please come down
daddy's running around town
looking for baby

G.

[Ganesha]

my soul like flowers
open when given light & food
I'm back petal-ing

smiling tansy

[kdnxdr]

night is a blanket
I restlessly toss away
morning, a pillow

[kdnxdr]

beginning of life
is the tenderling yet grown
of seed that is sown

[kdnxdr]

I scream at a face
that stoically stares at me
and lose all my breath

[D.J.]

Today grasps at spring
warm sun, cool fringe tugs both ends
the promise of more

[D.J.]

The sun lovingly
tempts and mesmerizes me
I return consumed

[Ganesha]

I scream at a face
that stoically stares at me
I lose all my breath

My breath is taken
by this haiku; I do say
a deep inhale, please

[kdnxdr]

water ripples near
laughter from the ocean's depth
begging me to play

[kdnxdr]

stealth of dark shadows

follows close behind my steps

father calls me home

[kdnxdr]

soft malleable bones
contoured and fitted to the womb
kings and queens yet born

[kdnxdr]

rest will close my eyes
sleep will hold me still and quiet
my mind runs all night

[kdnxdr]

memories are fire
embers are the ashes jewels
neither wants to die

[Pat~]

burn away the dross
pour what's left into Your mold
purify my heart

take the gold You've made
invest in eternity
use me as You will

[Ganesha]

young lilly buds bob
silver fish dodge black feet
sleeping Egret wakes

[rhymegirl]

Love is a stage play
whose actors forget their lines
and must improvise.

[rich]

Nice, rhymegirl.

[Prosthetic Foreheads]

This my first haiku
I thought I would post it here
Now I'll go away

[Pat~]

Not so fast, PF!
Hallowed haiku halls await
more poems from you!

[Pat~]

time for springcleaning
my Interior Castle's
sporting dust bunnies

[Prosthetic Foreheads]

Gone but not for good
Even now I have returned
Maybe stick around

[rich]

It's not, Prosthetic,

A place to stay or depart

It's just here, always.

[Prosthetic Foreheads]

Foreheads understand
But rocks to wind strings around
burned the playhouse down

[rich]

Lordy, Pro. I got the first two lines but the third takes on too many meanings.

[Prosthetic Foreheads]

I am not convinced
You really got the second?
Lest you know Giants

Then you'd know the third
Perhaps in time you will see
They might show the source

[rich]

I don't do puzzles

Unless the puzzler's convinced

There's no solution.

[Prosthetic Foreheads]

I'm truly sorry
I did not mean to confuse
The key lies within

But we can move on
I was just having some fun
Who knew haikus were?

[D.J.]

Birds sing happily
Plants sway in dancing rythm
Wind whistles backup

[Prosthetic Foreheads]

Birds sing happily
Plants sway in dancing rythm
Wind whistles backup


Does wind harmonize?
Or just echo melody?
I am quite intrigued

[rhymegirl]

Nice, rhymegirl.

Thanks!

[Pat~]

like first bird of spring
is the sound of a friend's voice
silent for too long

[JAlpha]

Here, like a river,
one can never step into
twice: this haiku thread

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[Ganesha]

wow, I love what you've done, JALpha


Ever receding inspiration

highway mirage floats
hot inspiration
evaporates as approached

[Pat~]

drifting like a leaf
i lean back in my tube and
ponder azure skies

[Spirit_Fire]

What a waste of time
Counting fingers on my hand
Over and over

[Pat~]

the hard thing about
mistakes is that you have to
learn to live with them

[Pat~]

consider inchworm
patient with his pokey half
as he weighs next step

[Ganesha]

Do I reply in
jest- or be sincere at best
I am remiss, dear

[D.J.]

Does wind harmonize?
Or just echo melody?
I am quite intrigued


LOL!

Truly musical -
I am not, I'll give a shot -
harmony, they do!

[D.J.]

What a waste of time
Counting fingers on my hand
Over and over

LOL!

Counting syllables?
It's fun if you give a chance
to the haiku form.

[rich]

Pat, nice.

My take of what might be smoother:

observe the inchworm

patient with his pokey self--

weighing his next step

[D.J.]

Pear and plum blossom
chance for fruit they promise us
wind says maybe not

[Pat~]

Pat, nice.

My take of what might be smoother:

observe the inchworm

patient with his pokey self--

weighing his next step

Rich--thanks for the feedback! I think that does flow more smoothly, though it might affect the meaning somewhat. What I meant by the poem was that sometimes there might be parts of ourselves that move more slowly than we'd like (eg. the brain moving more quickly than we can physically accomodate--like having a lot of ideas, but not enough time to work on all of them). But if we reflect on the inchworm, we might be more patient as well as more progressive in our course.

I think the poem could benefit from a comma or dash after 'inchworm', though I originally didn't want to put in any punctuation. It might make the meaning more clear.

(The inchworm's ways can also be applied to the marriage partnership ;) --thanks, Rob!)

[Godfather]

buffalo skinner,
got a stetson and a horse,
the ranch prince cowboy.

[Pat~]

lift my eyes to see
untold treasure in what I
cannot grasp--or lose

[Ganesha]

Katrina on New Orleans

Lay under water
black and brackish, I sip deep
death's awaiting me

[kdnxdr]

a wrinkle in time

watching mother make the bed

the covers yet smoothed

[kdnxdr]

biting succulent
fruit running down my new dress
stains to remember

[Ganesha]

I am dying &
you chat about succlants
I redress your you

[poetinahat]

your verse is bonfire
sparks pop and sear me, yet the
soft warmth nuzzles me

[kdnxdr]

near the fire I roast
too far away I am not warm
turning is a must

[Ganesha]

crisp morning air chill
burned off by speedy typing
hands are hot, mind sharp

[D.J.]

Fog greets our morning
lovingly it bathes nature
leaving sun to dry

[D.J.]

Morning kissed by fog
Day protected by soft clouds
Eve broached by sunset

[Pat~]

:idea:


...wondering about
poetinahat's new look...
smile or bru-ha-ha?

[poetinahat]

:idea:


...wondering about
poetinahat's new look...
smile or bru-ha-ha?
Fun on the harbour
You'll find carnival rides here
Sydney's Luna Park

[Pat~]

curiosity
has been satisfied...the smile
not so sinister ;)

[poetinahat]

stand inside the smile
you'll see, across the harbor...
Sydney Opera House

[Prosthetic Foreheads]

Does (the)* opera house
look creepy at night, as well?
I would like, if so.



*(opera= two or three syllables? I see poet counted as two...)

[poetinahat]

luminous mohawks
in back-to-back formation
grand, bizarre totems

[Ganesha]

Fog greets our morning
lovingly it bathes nature
leaving sun to dry


I like this one.

[Ganesha]

I kick up my feet
12 inches makes one foot
said the centipede

[Pat~]

stand inside the smile
you'll see, across the harbor...
Sydney Opera House

an exceedingly
generous smile, to let a
person stand inside!


[wow]

[kdnxdr]

only dialogue
answering the previous
spoken in haiku?

my apology
I did not pay attention
watching more close now

[poetinahat]

no, no, no, no, no:
no need to answer the last;
please post what you like!

[D.J.]

I like this one.

Thank you Ganesha
As you know, I like your work
More sharing ahead :)

[Pat~]

only dialogue
answering the previous
spoken in haiku?

my apology
I did not pay attention
watching more close now

oh no, not at all;
only rule is syllables--
(we break that one, too) ;)

[Zonk]

The seeds of our words
planted in the fresh white page
sprout fictional dreams...



:D:D:D

[JAlpha]

twelve thousand views plus
nearing a thousand posts now
let's plan a party
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[Stew21]

Imagination!
Hiding in the seat cushions
Ah-ha, there you are!

[rich]

From a series of Haiku from the mouths of Babes:

I do not know why

My dirty diapers are saved

In a special box

[Ganesha]

licking your full moon
I am slick with heat and want
tongue cramped, I smile love

[Ganesha]

love is so simple
the door is open, hinge swings
I am you, you me

[D.J.]

Electric rain sprang
leaping from the darkened sky -
boldly satisfied.

[D.J.]

Clouds pranced on parade
lightening offered fireworks -
thunder stole the show.

[D.J.]

Rain dampened the mood
noisy lights offered threats -
Sun devoured them.

[Stew21]

Why is she so mad?
So they question her next move,
she turns to fury.

[kdnxdr]

being is being
to not be is to not be
did you see that bee?

[Prosthetic Foreheads]

Why is she so mad?
So they question her next move,
she turns to fury.

Your child writes haiku?
Very talented indeed
They seem quite afraid

[Prosthetic Foreheads]

Rain is pouring down
Turning everything to green
Spring will be here soon

[kdnxdr]

teeth and lips and tongue
the mouth can be an abyss
or inspiration

[kdnxdr]

a coin has two sides,
symbols of contradiction
or a plan well spent?

[Stew21]

Your child writes haiku?
Very talented indeed
They seem quite afraid

Yes, they're talented.
We live in a haiku house.
They get it from mom.

;)

[kdnxdr]

drip drop trickle down
stream together in the storm
ride the afternoon

[Stew21]

A ride on the Hog
I grip onto your jacket
and lose grip on time.

[JAlpha]

A ride on the Hog
I grip onto your jacket
and lose grip on time.


I ride my own hog
I'm Cindy-harley-ella
the talk of the town

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[Stew21]

I ride my own hog
I'm Cindy-harley-ella
the talk of the town

http://photobucket.com/albums/c34/JAlpha/th_TR3HarleyWoman.gif (http://photobucket.com/albums/c34/JAlpha/?action=view&current=TR3HarleyWoman.gif)

Ever so jealous
of Cindy-harley-ella
I don't ride solo. =(

[JAlpha]

Perhaps a scooter
they can be quite elegant
I've one of those too

http://photobucket.com/albums/c34/JAlpha/th_TR3scooter.gif (http://photobucket.com/albums/c34/JAlpha/?action=view&current=TR3scooter.gif)

[Ganesha]

Perhaps a scooter
they can be quite elegant
I've one of those too

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emerald with envy
you both roll by me and wave
re-cycling mood

[poetinahat]

come on, Ganesha
hop on, and we'll buzz those two...
mine's parked 'round the back!

http://www.freescoot.com/index_fichiers/image626.jpg

[Ganesha]

Lifting my leg to
mount, okay that sounds so bad
I am right behind

wipe that ***smile*** right off my face,Okay?

[Stew21]

nice fake smile given
polite to acknowledge me
but nothing to say

[Ganesha]

nice fake smile given
polite to acknowledge me
but nothing to say

hey, what you say, I
am sorry if I have been
a thread stopper up

[Stew21]

hey, what you say, I
am sorry if I have been
a thread stopper up

my haiku was not
a reference to your smile!
It was in real life!
:) :) :)

(sorry for that!)

[JAlpha]

come on, Ganesha
hop on, and we'll buzz those two...
mine's parked 'round the back!




Vroom. Vroom. Eat my dust!
brush the bugs out of your teeth
catch me if you can
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[Pat~]

Imagination!
Hiding in the seat cushions
Ah-ha, there you are!

didn't think to look
there...but that's because I lost
Imagination :Shrug: