[FONT="]Chapter two: Werewolf’s curse.[/FONT]
After seeing Lily and the man walking away in the distance, my surroundings transformed back to where I originally was. The cat was resting on my leg again, purring peacefully. I scratched her head and then she stood up and looked at me.
“Did you find anything important?” She asked. “Like you name?”
“I think so,” I answered. “Is this name Lily Rosewood?”
“Yes it is,” replied the cat delightedly, “That little girl you seen in that memory, she was you! You were so cute, but please don’t tell anyone. I’m not supposed to peek in someone’s memory without permission.”
“Um, okay”
All of a sudden, there was a loud, yet recognizable scream. I stood up and looked around the forest with alertness.
“You don’t have to look around so much.” Said the cat, “Do you remember what this man in your memory said about you possessing great ability?”
“He said something about that, yes,” I said, trying to wonder what the cat was trying to say, “Why?”
“Do you want to know what that ability is?”
“Yes I do”
“Close your eyes, and remain calm”
I did what the cat told me. Staying calm seemed so easy. My environment appeared in black with a blue outline. I looked around the forest until I saw two moving living beings which were blue in color, one of them seem to be a girl fleeing from the other being that I could not identify. I knew the one being pursued was Aiyana, but she is so far-off. I opened my eyes and looked down at the cat.
“That girl, do you know her?” asked the cat, “She must be in trouble, let’s go help her. There’s something else that I want to show you.”
The cat ran ahead through the bushes and I soon followed without hesitation. Not running for very long, I began to notice of a cluster of trees just up ahead.
“I think we should jump across those trees” insinuated the cat, “That way we should get to the girl much more quickly. See that tree over there? On the count of three, we’ll jump on that big branch. And keep your eyes closed so you can pinpoint this girl’s location. Ready, One…..Two……..THREE”
I sprung forward and ascended and perched upon a large solid branch. I felt something land on my right shoulder. I turned and saw the cat, who looked back at me.
“Don’t worry about me,” she said, “you should be focusing on helping your friend. Now let’s keep going, and keep your eyes closed and focus. You can still see where you’re going.”
I closed my eyes again, and heard panting. It sounded like it was coming from every direction, making it difficult to follow the sounds. The two blue images returned to my mind, heading in my direction. I leaped forward to the nearest tree branch, and kept going until I brought myself to the ground. I watched them patiently.
“Pretty smart move getting ahead of them,” said the cat, impressed “Now to show you what I promised. Are you left handed or right handed?”
“Do you expect me to know that?” I snapped.
“Okay never mind then, as I recall, I think you are right handed, right? Yes you are definitely. Sorry, forgot. Reach out your right hand and focus your energy through your fingers.”
I extended my right arm forward. Looking at it, I envisioned some sort of electrical surge emitting through my fingers. Immediately there appeared a swirl of blue light which formed into a blue ball. The ball of light grew larger and brighter which each passing second. I could hear the two figures approaching, so closing my eyes to see their outlines wasn’t really necessary. My eyes widened to see the first one running out in the open to be Aiyana, followed by some grotesque looking creature chasing her. She looked at me with a gaping mouth.
“Get down!” I barked.
Aiyana jumped forward, landing in the dirt on her stomach. The creature came at us with its feral hostility. For some reason, it stopped running. The creature was huge and muscular standing on two legs. Blood and drool dripped from his canine-like face. Yellow stained his teeth and his claws were not only razor-sharp, but were also trickling in blood. I aimed the ball of light at the creature, shaking violently as I looked into his golden eyes. The creature gave a deafening roar. He swiftly moved toward me with ferocity, which is what I was waiting for. My energy rushed through my hands with just enough force for the ball of light to blast the creature backward into a tree. I watched the creature carefully for a moment, and noticed it sitting there motionless. I took a deep breath and looked down at Aiyana who was quivering and whimpering like a frightened puppy. She stopped moving and looked up at me. She smiled, but at the same time tears slowly rolled down her face. She quickly got on her feet then wrapped he arms around me grasping me tightly.
“Oh, my God,” she panted, “You’re okay. “This place, I don’t like it here.”
“Lily,” I whispered. “It’s Lily.”
“What? Who’s Lily?”
“My name is Lily.”
Aiyana’s hug was even tighter and it started to become painful.
“Nice to meet you Lily,” said Aiyana, who finally stopped crying. “Let’s go home.”
Aiyana released her grip. We turned around and started walking. I stopped walking after hearing a thumping sound. Aiyana was lying on the grass, which was covered in a pool of blood. I walked towards her to get a closer look at her. I turned her over and saw a large wound gushing with some thick red substance. A wound so deep, that a small part of white bone became visible under the flesh. Looking a wound this deep made me shudder. Aiyana sat up and frowned.
“I’ m sorry.” she said, “That creature, you should have seen how sharp those claws are, and how foul he smelled .He slashed my leg, which now as you already know, quite disturbing to see. It really hurts to walk.”
I continued to examine the injured leg.
“I don’t think we are too far from the city.” I said.
The sky transformed into a yellowish gold color and the clouds were dark purple. White lights flickered between the clouds followed by a noise. Aiyana shivered and her tears became visible.
“I warned you this place is dangerous!” She said barked and cried even harder, “Mum must be so worried. Judging by the sunset it must be five o’ clock. She could have called the police, we could be dead here. And—Lily, why are you-”
I glanced back at Aiyana, who all of a sudden stopped sobbing.
“What’s wrong?” I asked
“You’re not like the other people I’ve met,” replied Aiyana
“Really? How so?”
“At a time like this, an average person would panic. But you, you’re just the opposite, you’re so…. So… calm. Stubborn…yet…very calm. I like your personality, now you have calmed me down already.”
Aiyana looked to another direction
“Look over there,” She pointed at the black cat, who I haven’t noticed since the encounter with the beast.
The cat walked forward and meowed. Aiyana reached out her hand to pet her.
“What’s this kitty doing here?”
“It’s my cat,” I replied.
“Oh, really, does he have a name?”
The cat rolled over meowing and purring, seeming to enjoy being stroked. she quickly got up and jumped backward, hissing loudly. Her back arched, and her tail twitched sideways.
“Something is wrong,” said Aiyana, “When cats behave like that, that means something must have spooked them. But what-”
Her eyes expanded after she looked up. She shivered then collapsed. I noticed a shadow between me and Aiyana, growing larger and wider.
I turned around to see the monster in the air with its mouth open, plummeting down at me fast. I could have darted out of the way, but doing so will hurt Aiyana, so I stood my ground. Before there was enough time to defend my self, the beast landed on me and pushed me onto the ground. Blood dripped from my right shoulder after the creature’s fangs impaled it. I could not move my other arm, while it’s being pressed down by the rest of my body. Struggling free was impossible. The creature’s teeth dug deeper into my shoulder tearing my muscle tissues. The excruciating pain made my teeth and my eyes watery.
“Mew” The cat ran in front of me. There was a flash of bright light and there stood a girl, with hair as black as mine, with eyes as yellow as the creatures and with catlike ears on top. She looked down and winked at me. She jumped backward and extended her arms forward with widened hands.
“ I call upon the fire dog spirit, breathe thy fiery breath, to scorch the wickedness that pollutes our land. I SUMMON THEE!”
Out of nowhere appeared three dog-shaped flames encircling the girl. The dogs faced my direction and one of the charged jumping on the creatures back and bit him. The creature released his grip and struggled to get the fire dog off, but the dog didn’t budge. Following the first dog, the two dogs rushed in and each one grabbed an arm. I turned around and watched helplessly as flames spread around them, morphing in to a fiery sphere. The beast howled in pain. The sphere began to expand slowly until it made a sudden explosion, leaving no remains.
Well, some people liked it, some people have a problem with the cat, but they wouldn't tell me what's wrong. Does this piece protray the Dues Ex Machina, or what ever that means?
What do you think? what can be improved from this piece.
After seeing Lily and the man walking away in the distance, my surroundings transformed back to where I originally was. The cat was resting on my leg again, purring peacefully. I scratched her head and then she stood up and looked at me.
“Did you find anything important?” She asked. “Like you name?”
“I think so,” I answered. “Is this name Lily Rosewood?”
“Yes it is,” replied the cat delightedly, “That little girl you seen in that memory, she was you! You were so cute, but please don’t tell anyone. I’m not supposed to peek in someone’s memory without permission.”
“Um, okay”
All of a sudden, there was a loud, yet recognizable scream. I stood up and looked around the forest with alertness.
“You don’t have to look around so much.” Said the cat, “Do you remember what this man in your memory said about you possessing great ability?”
“He said something about that, yes,” I said, trying to wonder what the cat was trying to say, “Why?”
“Do you want to know what that ability is?”
“Yes I do”
“Close your eyes, and remain calm”
I did what the cat told me. Staying calm seemed so easy. My environment appeared in black with a blue outline. I looked around the forest until I saw two moving living beings which were blue in color, one of them seem to be a girl fleeing from the other being that I could not identify. I knew the one being pursued was Aiyana, but she is so far-off. I opened my eyes and looked down at the cat.
“That girl, do you know her?” asked the cat, “She must be in trouble, let’s go help her. There’s something else that I want to show you.”
The cat ran ahead through the bushes and I soon followed without hesitation. Not running for very long, I began to notice of a cluster of trees just up ahead.
“I think we should jump across those trees” insinuated the cat, “That way we should get to the girl much more quickly. See that tree over there? On the count of three, we’ll jump on that big branch. And keep your eyes closed so you can pinpoint this girl’s location. Ready, One…..Two……..THREE”
I sprung forward and ascended and perched upon a large solid branch. I felt something land on my right shoulder. I turned and saw the cat, who looked back at me.
“Don’t worry about me,” she said, “you should be focusing on helping your friend. Now let’s keep going, and keep your eyes closed and focus. You can still see where you’re going.”
I closed my eyes again, and heard panting. It sounded like it was coming from every direction, making it difficult to follow the sounds. The two blue images returned to my mind, heading in my direction. I leaped forward to the nearest tree branch, and kept going until I brought myself to the ground. I watched them patiently.
“Pretty smart move getting ahead of them,” said the cat, impressed “Now to show you what I promised. Are you left handed or right handed?”
“Do you expect me to know that?” I snapped.
“Okay never mind then, as I recall, I think you are right handed, right? Yes you are definitely. Sorry, forgot. Reach out your right hand and focus your energy through your fingers.”
I extended my right arm forward. Looking at it, I envisioned some sort of electrical surge emitting through my fingers. Immediately there appeared a swirl of blue light which formed into a blue ball. The ball of light grew larger and brighter which each passing second. I could hear the two figures approaching, so closing my eyes to see their outlines wasn’t really necessary. My eyes widened to see the first one running out in the open to be Aiyana, followed by some grotesque looking creature chasing her. She looked at me with a gaping mouth.
“Get down!” I barked.
Aiyana jumped forward, landing in the dirt on her stomach. The creature came at us with its feral hostility. For some reason, it stopped running. The creature was huge and muscular standing on two legs. Blood and drool dripped from his canine-like face. Yellow stained his teeth and his claws were not only razor-sharp, but were also trickling in blood. I aimed the ball of light at the creature, shaking violently as I looked into his golden eyes. The creature gave a deafening roar. He swiftly moved toward me with ferocity, which is what I was waiting for. My energy rushed through my hands with just enough force for the ball of light to blast the creature backward into a tree. I watched the creature carefully for a moment, and noticed it sitting there motionless. I took a deep breath and looked down at Aiyana who was quivering and whimpering like a frightened puppy. She stopped moving and looked up at me. She smiled, but at the same time tears slowly rolled down her face. She quickly got on her feet then wrapped he arms around me grasping me tightly.
“Oh, my God,” she panted, “You’re okay. “This place, I don’t like it here.”
“Lily,” I whispered. “It’s Lily.”
“What? Who’s Lily?”
“My name is Lily.”
Aiyana’s hug was even tighter and it started to become painful.
“Nice to meet you Lily,” said Aiyana, who finally stopped crying. “Let’s go home.”
Aiyana released her grip. We turned around and started walking. I stopped walking after hearing a thumping sound. Aiyana was lying on the grass, which was covered in a pool of blood. I walked towards her to get a closer look at her. I turned her over and saw a large wound gushing with some thick red substance. A wound so deep, that a small part of white bone became visible under the flesh. Looking a wound this deep made me shudder. Aiyana sat up and frowned.
“I’ m sorry.” she said, “That creature, you should have seen how sharp those claws are, and how foul he smelled .He slashed my leg, which now as you already know, quite disturbing to see. It really hurts to walk.”
I continued to examine the injured leg.
“I don’t think we are too far from the city.” I said.
The sky transformed into a yellowish gold color and the clouds were dark purple. White lights flickered between the clouds followed by a noise. Aiyana shivered and her tears became visible.
“I warned you this place is dangerous!” She said barked and cried even harder, “Mum must be so worried. Judging by the sunset it must be five o’ clock. She could have called the police, we could be dead here. And—Lily, why are you-”
I glanced back at Aiyana, who all of a sudden stopped sobbing.
“What’s wrong?” I asked
“You’re not like the other people I’ve met,” replied Aiyana
“Really? How so?”
“At a time like this, an average person would panic. But you, you’re just the opposite, you’re so…. So… calm. Stubborn…yet…very calm. I like your personality, now you have calmed me down already.”
Aiyana looked to another direction
“Look over there,” She pointed at the black cat, who I haven’t noticed since the encounter with the beast.
The cat walked forward and meowed. Aiyana reached out her hand to pet her.
“What’s this kitty doing here?”
“It’s my cat,” I replied.
“Oh, really, does he have a name?”
The cat rolled over meowing and purring, seeming to enjoy being stroked. she quickly got up and jumped backward, hissing loudly. Her back arched, and her tail twitched sideways.
“Something is wrong,” said Aiyana, “When cats behave like that, that means something must have spooked them. But what-”
Her eyes expanded after she looked up. She shivered then collapsed. I noticed a shadow between me and Aiyana, growing larger and wider.
I turned around to see the monster in the air with its mouth open, plummeting down at me fast. I could have darted out of the way, but doing so will hurt Aiyana, so I stood my ground. Before there was enough time to defend my self, the beast landed on me and pushed me onto the ground. Blood dripped from my right shoulder after the creature’s fangs impaled it. I could not move my other arm, while it’s being pressed down by the rest of my body. Struggling free was impossible. The creature’s teeth dug deeper into my shoulder tearing my muscle tissues. The excruciating pain made my teeth and my eyes watery.
“Mew” The cat ran in front of me. There was a flash of bright light and there stood a girl, with hair as black as mine, with eyes as yellow as the creatures and with catlike ears on top. She looked down and winked at me. She jumped backward and extended her arms forward with widened hands.
“ I call upon the fire dog spirit, breathe thy fiery breath, to scorch the wickedness that pollutes our land. I SUMMON THEE!”
Out of nowhere appeared three dog-shaped flames encircling the girl. The dogs faced my direction and one of the charged jumping on the creatures back and bit him. The creature released his grip and struggled to get the fire dog off, but the dog didn’t budge. Following the first dog, the two dogs rushed in and each one grabbed an arm. I turned around and watched helplessly as flames spread around them, morphing in to a fiery sphere. The beast howled in pain. The sphere began to expand slowly until it made a sudden explosion, leaving no remains.
Well, some people liked it, some people have a problem with the cat, but they wouldn't tell me what's wrong. Does this piece protray the Dues Ex Machina, or what ever that means?
What do you think? what can be improved from this piece.
