a short story (about 3 pages single spaced)

[tseug]

a short story; haven't gotten around to titling it.
i don't write much, i'm young and very inexperience; i could use any/all comments/criticisms.
no one has checked it over yet, so i'm certain there will be many errors, please point them out if you can.

MOD notes: tseug, I moved your story here (http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showpost.php?p=1760687&postcount=1) so you could get better response. If you have any questions, please pm me. Haggis

[Haggis]

Hi, tseug. Welcome to AW.

Welcome to the horror forum as well.

I'm going to be moving your story to "Share Your Work." That's the place where stories are posted and others critique them. You'll get a much better response there than you will here.

Please also take the time to poke around and see all the areas of the water cooler. There's lots to read and lots to learn. I look forward to your contributions.