OK, I have been trying my damndest to practice the show dont tell thing. its hard when you are used to doing it the WRONG way. Anyway, I thought we could make up a subject and SHOW it instead of telling the sentence.
Ill start and we should keep on topic of the "tell" sentence. Once you take the "next tell" sentence and show it, then you get to make up a tell sentence for the next writer.
Here we go!
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Tell: John was sick.
Show: As John rolled over, he couldnt get the sensation of the spinning room out of his thoughts. He closed his eyes to get away from it, but could still feel the spinning motion. As he opened his eyes and saw the ceiling turning, he felt the urge to give back that case of beer that he drank earlier.
Next tell: The shirt she was wearing was hideous.
Ill start and we should keep on topic of the "tell" sentence. Once you take the "next tell" sentence and show it, then you get to make up a tell sentence for the next writer.
Here we go!
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Tell: John was sick.
Show: As John rolled over, he couldnt get the sensation of the spinning room out of his thoughts. He closed his eyes to get away from it, but could still feel the spinning motion. As he opened his eyes and saw the ceiling turning, he felt the urge to give back that case of beer that he drank earlier.
Next tell: The shirt she was wearing was hideous.
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