Short Poem Exercise

[LimeyDawg]

Okay, lets get short. Post your best, short poem (I'll leave the definition of short up to you.) In the vein (or is it vain, now, lol) of my "tongue (http://absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=65070)" poems, the rules are simple. Describe a body part, any part, in the most poetic way possible...and in as few words as you can. (Dave's probably got a ton on the purple throbber) but have a go. Here's my fave short poem, which I've referenced often in the past as an example of showing over telling:

Artichoke

O heart, weighed down by so many wings.


Joe Hutchinson

[Angelinity]

and the purlple throbber's 'companion' ... (it's all limey's fault for bringing it up lol)

thorned lotus,
abysmal cave,
man's last
elusive
frontier

..tis what (approximately) an ol pal used to muse :D

...so now we covered the important parts lol... who's gonna do 'feet'?

[scarletpeaches]

Plates of meet
that smell of cheese
they have me beat
now wash them, please.

:D

[scarletpeaches]

My nose
can smell a rose
and davids' toes.

[Angelinity]

index

i point, beckon,
negate and ballet,
possess first-hand knowledge of
places none would tread
and i hold secrets
none of you want shared.

[Angelinity]

sheesh... i ain't a body part... (am I -- oh in the scheme of things i is :D)

HIP

catches the eye
of man lust
sister envy

[Ganesha]

index, the leader
saturn ponders index
ring in-love
baby, well, will always be baby
thumb a many dexterous thing

index & thumb
marriage of Jupiter & Sun
Om- slipping through my fingers

[NeuroFizz]

I am but a finger
searching for
your leaky dike.

[Stew21]

necklace trails
down gentle slope

the braided silver
sparks his hope

that he may see
it to the end

as well as the breasts
it lays between.

[LimeyDawg]

Wow. I was only gone for an hour...

[Stew21]

TITS

A-breast of the situation


way to milk it, Daves.
such titilating conversation...
brings back fond mammories.

[NeuroFizz]

Gland to see all the punnery.
Adipose to catch my breath on such a jiggly topic.
It's stupendulous.

[Angelinity]

tit

allure of mother's milk
womanly musk - the scent
shall never leave his nose,
a hound for comfort,
sweet repose.

[NeuroFizz]

All male things impossible,
'tis to look cool
while walking to beloved
across the room, naked
with excitement full

[Stew21]

Palm

touched

...to another - offered peace
...to child's head - parental love
...to heart - my oath

[NeuroFizz]

I've flushed too man troilets,
nearly passed out from my stenchly odes
But iambic once again,
after all, trying still.

[LimeyDawg]

Hairs on the back of her neck

Patrons to my play,
appraise my whispered oration
in standing ovation
of admiration.

[Stew21]

aching from ibuprofen
and a lifetime of drinking gin
his poor liver revved it's motor
jumped out to find a donor.

[Stew21]

Lower back

spine indents,
back spreads to hips.
Oh, to touch it
with his fingers and lips
and would but for the scroll of ink;
a name colored orange, red, and pink.
another man's name on her tat
ain't no way he's touching that.

[dclary]

webbed toes make ten
look
like
nine
and yet I do not quack

[Stew21]

Flip-Off

That one finger
could say so much
by standing its ground
while the others fold.

[oneiopen]

Two lips lingering

Curved pink petals parted,
pressed, tasting skin.

[oneiopen]

Nipple

Cylinder of pleasure teased
by fingertip, tongue and lip.

[Stew21]

Shoulders

Upon strong shoulders
young child perched atop the world -
Dad's eagle nest view

[Ganesha]

my left hand
waved
to my right

[Ganesha]

my third eye
sees almost nothing
glasses don't help

[P.H.Delarran]

nostrils;
partners in slime
one slack worker
dams it all



eyelashes;
fringed awning
to the soul's
entry way

moustache;
better left
to a man

[LaceWing]

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[kdnxdr]

cameo, cameo,
what face are thou,
oh, cameo?