Story Paragraph Trouble

You add more sentences?

I'm sorry, I know that's not helpful. Example:

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Tom and Sally strolled near the beach. The waves raced back and forth and the wind blew Sally's long purple hair into her face. Her hair was so long it even whipped into Tom's face. He winced at the razor-like slaps. If only he had more than a few inches over Sally's five foot six, he wouldn't have had to worry about scarring face lacerations.

"It's so beautiful, Tom." She smiled and the dimple in her right cheek flashed.

"Not as beautiful as you." He held her hand tighter. His hand engulfed her smaller one, and her cool, soft skin felt good to the rough calluses on his fingers.
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Pick a POV for the scene and relay the information from that character's viewpoint. I chose Tom.

Namatu nailed it.

Pick a POV and express how everything looks and feels through the lens of that character. Otherwise the omniscient POV is just lurking and lacking the intimacy you were probably shooting for.

Well, what is he looking at? What makes him say what he does? The soft twinkle in her eyes, the smoothness of the skin on her face, the light, the waves, her breathing, her smile? What does it do to him inside? What does he feel? Anxious, overtaken with love, protective?

You can describe these things, without being pointed, mentioning them one by one without saying "he was in love". The subtext is in the description, just as subtext is in the expression of faces in a movie, as well as the actual words that come out.

If you're also in her head, then why does she smile? Is she remembering a past time? Is she placing her hopes and dreams in him? Is she just humoring him? What does she look at or concentrate on, and what about those things?

Just consider everything about what is going on in the heads of your characters, this drives both description and dialogue in these sorts of situations. For instance, the waves could be peaceful or in turmoil, setting a different mood for the scene.

Etc., Etc., Etc.

Hope that helps

If a "thick" descriptive paragraph comes difficult to you, it might be because you're thinking in terms of a thick paragraph rather than just looking at it as series of strong sentences. Write one strong sentence, then another, then another. Eventually the thick paragraph will grow into itself.

Sometimes thinking of everything in action/reaction units helps. As mentioned above, if she smiles and it's in his pov, the smile is an action, and his reaction will consist of an emotion, a thought and a decision to take an action, followed by a new action (either he moves in some way or he speaks). So, she smiles, and he feels as awed as the firsttime he saw her smile, and he thinks she doesn't even know the truth, so he decides to tell her, and he says, "you're so beautiful."

Now, you probably wouldn't go through all those steps for every single line of dialogue, but when you want the pacing to be slow, during a quiet moment, you might spell out the interim steps. In the example above, you'd probably skip making the decision explicit, and skip over that, leaving something like:

She smiled.

He felt as awed as the first day he'd met her. And the most amazing thing was that she didn't even know the truth about herself. He should tell her more often, and maybe she'd finally believe it. "You're so beautiful."

Not your story, just an example. Check out Jack Bickham's Scene & Structure for more on these action/reaction units.

JD

This wasn't your question, but take note of the punctuation in Namatu's dialog tags and the comma in the first bit of dialog.