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William Haskins
02-19-2006, 04:07 AM
By D.H. Lawrence (http://www.nottingham.ac.uk/mss/online/dhlawrence/)
(1885 - 1930)

Tarantella

Sad as he sits on the white sea-stone
And the suave sea chuckles, and turns to the moon,
And the moon significant smiles at the cliffs and the boulders.
He sits like a shade by the flood alone
While I dance a tarantella on the rocks, and the croon
Of my mockery mocks at him over the waves’ bright shoulders.

What can I do but dance alone,
Dance to the sliding sea and the moon,
For the moon on my breast and the air on my limbs and the foam on my feet?
For surely this earnest man has none
Of the night in his soul, and none of the tune
Of the waters within him; only the world’s old wisdom to bleat.

I wish a wild sea-fellow would come down the glittering shingle,
A soulless neckar, with winking seas in his eyes
And falling waves in his arms, and the lost soul’s kiss
On his lips: I long to be soulless, I tingle
To touch the sea in the last surprise
Of fiery coldness, to be gone in a lost soul’s bliss.

Cassie88
02-19-2006, 04:17 AM
If I met a "sea-fellow" who asked what poetry was, I'd read him this poem.

Makes me think of Dylan Thomas.

Gorgeous poem.

mkcbunny
02-19-2006, 10:42 AM
For me, the structure of this poem interfered with the meaning. Each time I read it, I felt further away from the poet and the words. I appreciated each line and what the intent was, but I felt like I was riding an ornery mule the whole way. I gave it a 3.

Paint
02-19-2006, 06:31 PM
Wonderful! I love word play like this. I went to the ocean today...

skylarburris
02-20-2006, 08:48 PM
I very much appreciated the alliteration, the rhythm, and the rhyme...and yet it had almost no emotional impact on me. So I gave it a 3.

poetinahat
02-21-2006, 03:07 AM
I found it mostly effervescent and gleeful - a tall glass of cool mineral water. But for some of the stuffy, melodramatic expressions ("What can I do but...", "For surely..."), I might have felt a greater pang at the heroine's plight.

As it is, I enjoyed the playful language and the suggestion of taunt and captivity.

4.

Anya Smith
03-16-2006, 09:07 AM
I enjoyed the word play but I prefer rhyming poems. I gave it a 4.

May I post one of my own here?