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Please, could you help me? This is from my new WIP, a character's dreams are in reported speech, but as it's in the past, and he dreams about the future, the grammar is giving me a bit of the headache. Is this correct?
After several minutes of silence Paul, clearly battling the shame, began to share with Natalie his dreams of the perfect future. He was going to work hard and when he finally earns enough to escape the rat race they would find a dwelling in the countryside and live the real life, surrounded with fields and forests. Their child would grow in the eternal cycle. And it would grow up to be a pure man, pure woman at last, one who didn’t run away from the heritage, one who never severed the ties with the Primordial Mother.
After several minutes of silence Paul, clearly battling the shame, began to share with Natalie his dreams of the perfect future. He was going to work hard and when he finally earns enough to escape the rat race they would find a dwelling in the countryside and live the real life, surrounded with fields and forests. Their child would grow in the eternal cycle. And it would grow up to be a pure man, pure woman at last, one who didn’t run away from the heritage, one who never severed the ties with the Primordial Mother.