Peotry With Opposites

[catian]

This makes a change from rhyming with sounds.
let's use opposite words instead like this
New lines, every two lines like this:

1st line:the noise was loud it came from out
2nd line: but not as loud as the growl that grew within.

3rd line: In the shade-freckled path's chill
4th line: your smile lights my journey's heat.

Then the 5th person would create a new line.

[kborsden]

rhyme each last word with its opposite. The opposite to 'out' is 'in' - these do not rhyme. Do you mean that instead of rhyming, we write a line which uses the opposite to the last word of the previous line?

[catian]

The opposite to 'out' is 'in' - these do not rhyme. Do you mean that instead of rhyming, we write a line which uses the opposite to the last word of the previous line?
Hi kborsden, sorry yes that is what I mean.
not rhyming is such but using opposites.:)

[kborsden]

the noise was loud it came from out

but not as loud as the growl that grew within.

[catian]

the fun began to swing without

[Ambrosia]

I see a problem with the exercise, Catian. If the last word never changes, it will just be a repetition between out and in, which will run out quickly. Perhaps you could have the third person (fifth person, seventh person, etc.) think of a new line with a different word to provide an opposite word for. For instance,

1st line:the noise was loud it came from out
2nd line: but not as loud as the growl that grew within.

3rd line: In the shade-freckled path's chill
4th line: your smile lights my journey's heat.

Then the 5th person would create a new line. What do you think?

You should also edit your original post by choosing "go advanced once you click edit, and edit your title by taking out the "rhyming with". If you just leave "opposites" it tells people what the thread is about. Otherwise they will be confused.

[catian]

The opposite to 'out' is 'in' - these do not rhyme. Do you mean that instead of rhyming, we write a line which uses the opposite to the last word of the previous line?

I see a problem with the exercise, Catian. If the last word never changes, it will just be a repetition between out and in, which will run out quickly. Perhaps you could have the third person (fifth person, seventh person, etc.) think of a new line with a different word to provide an opposite word for. For instance,

1st line:the noise was loud it came from out
2nd line: but not as loud as the growl that grew within.

3rd line: In the shade-freckled path's chill
4th line: your smile lights my journey's heat.

Then the 5th person would create a new line. What do you think?

You should also edit your original post by choosing "go advanced once you click edit, and edit your title by taking out the "rhyming with". If you just leave "opposites" it tells people what the thread is about. Otherwise they will be confused.
Hello Ambrosia that sounds perfect lets do it this way, it makes more sense:)

[kborsden]

We could also do couplets: first verse is the opposite, second verse is a new word for the next post to be opposite to.

[catian]

We could also do couplets: first verse is the opposite, second verse is a new word for the next post to be opposite to.
that sounds great let's do that too.

[catian]

the word fell silent almost light

[kborsden]

Red = your word; purple = opposite; green = new word

the word fell silence almost light

every shard recovered from the darkness
is a new born splinter of hope

[catian]

the skies looked down to find despair
and gave it smiles of outer grace

[kborsden]

Pressed against a man's eye, she is disgraced,
but even so, she has delicate pace.

[catian]

the wind whistled in waves so quick
it liftted leaves up down, sublime

[Ambrosia]

you devil, it's my turn to debase
and point to your blatant crime