Well, I recently let a friend read over my query letter. He pointed out a few sentences, which he changed. I don't think they are grammatically incorrect. I think he changed it because he wanted to make the voice more formal, but I'm not sure.
I can't ask him for clarification because he's out of town for a month. He did say before he left that they're only "suggested" changes.
Can anyone help me with these sentences? Is it just a matter of voice or is there something he's changed that I'm missing.
[FONT="]Example 1.
[/FONT][FONT="]In an interview you did with John Doe, you said that essentially the heart of a book's success is through word of mouth.[/FONT]
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In an interview which you did with John Doe, you had said that essentially, [/FONT][FONT="]the heart of a book's success is through word of mouth.
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Example 2.
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[/FONT][FONT="]The main character, [/FONT][FONT="]Scarlett O'Hara, in [/FONT][FONT="]GONE WITH THE WIND believes so.[/FONT]
[FONT="]The main character in [/FONT][FONT="]GONE WITH THE WIND, Scarlett O'Hara, [/FONT][FONT="]believes so.[/FONT]
I can't ask him for clarification because he's out of town for a month. He did say before he left that they're only "suggested" changes.
Can anyone help me with these sentences? Is it just a matter of voice or is there something he's changed that I'm missing.
[FONT="]Example 1.
[/FONT][FONT="]In an interview you did with John Doe, you said that essentially the heart of a book's success is through word of mouth.[/FONT]
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In an interview which you did with John Doe, you had said that essentially, [/FONT][FONT="]the heart of a book's success is through word of mouth.
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Example 2.
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[/FONT][FONT="]The main character, [/FONT][FONT="]Scarlett O'Hara, in [/FONT][FONT="]GONE WITH THE WIND believes so.[/FONT]
[FONT="]The main character in [/FONT][FONT="]GONE WITH THE WIND, Scarlett O'Hara, [/FONT][FONT="]believes so.[/FONT]
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