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09-09-2005, 12:30 PM
:heart: I've been trying to rewrite Accidental Betrayal(some pgs. R posted in the screenplay section) and I realize I need to do some work with the character's as well as the story. They need more depth and individuality added to their present beings. I don't want them to be flat or echo someone else.
(one ex: Carlo, who doesn't have a big part and is Maria's younger brother-he's a real geek all the way, even down to wearing a "Star Trek" shirt. He has friends who R geeks just like him and they play pretend space games with walkie talkies. A little odd at age 13 and this deffinately shows, he's not going to be the type to take over the family.)
Maria(the main char.) is who she is but needs more work. She's very sophisticated/elegant and also independant and strongheaded. She wants to be a proper socially acceptable high society lady, more than she wants to be thought of as a reputed gangster's daughter. Don't get me wrong she loves her family, is best friends with her brother Mario and she's an Italian girl all the way. She's intellectual and want to be lawyer. In the story she falls passionatly in love with Paul(the brilliant atty in the DA's ofc.). Still there's something missing and flat. The allure mystery and humanity need to be there.
Mario(Maria's older brother by 6 years) is wild, a lady's man, likes to be cool; yet he's irresponsible and drinks way too much. He's got charm and whit, wants to be tougher than he really is. He's obviously more of an idiot, than someone who can take over the family business. Still he is shallow and needs more development into his own unique personality. Something more exciting than what's coming forth now.
Al(Maria's older bro, by 10 years) is more serious/stable and has a head for leadership and business. He could run the family. He's not cold, but does take charge. Al care's about Maria, but she feels very invisible to him. Al is the one that his father has chosen to take over 4 him and then he dies early on in story.
Gino(Maria's father) is a serious old country, and is the most powerful reputed crime boss in the US. He's somewhat generic, at this point, and the last thing I want to do is have him be another echo of Brando's char in "The Godfather" and all the rest of the Brando cookiecutter chars. He needs to be somewhat cliche for the genre, but yet have a colorful flair that's all his own.
Paul(Maria's Lover) is an upperclass sophisticated yuppie. He went to Yale and wants to make a name for himself as a bussiness atty., but at present , even though he's brilliant, is on the staff of the DA's office. A good place, since it's his 1st year out of lawschool and it wouldn't make much of a story with him in a different job. After all where would the passion fueled conflict.
This has been frustrating trying to furthur develop these characters and bring them to a real life. Carlo is unique and quirky and yet these more important characters need to be with out taking away from who they already are.
Have been trying to work with extensive worksheets and char. boigraphies, but they're still flat.
HELP!
Thanx Jen
(one ex: Carlo, who doesn't have a big part and is Maria's younger brother-he's a real geek all the way, even down to wearing a "Star Trek" shirt. He has friends who R geeks just like him and they play pretend space games with walkie talkies. A little odd at age 13 and this deffinately shows, he's not going to be the type to take over the family.)
Maria(the main char.) is who she is but needs more work. She's very sophisticated/elegant and also independant and strongheaded. She wants to be a proper socially acceptable high society lady, more than she wants to be thought of as a reputed gangster's daughter. Don't get me wrong she loves her family, is best friends with her brother Mario and she's an Italian girl all the way. She's intellectual and want to be lawyer. In the story she falls passionatly in love with Paul(the brilliant atty in the DA's ofc.). Still there's something missing and flat. The allure mystery and humanity need to be there.
Mario(Maria's older brother by 6 years) is wild, a lady's man, likes to be cool; yet he's irresponsible and drinks way too much. He's got charm and whit, wants to be tougher than he really is. He's obviously more of an idiot, than someone who can take over the family business. Still he is shallow and needs more development into his own unique personality. Something more exciting than what's coming forth now.
Al(Maria's older bro, by 10 years) is more serious/stable and has a head for leadership and business. He could run the family. He's not cold, but does take charge. Al care's about Maria, but she feels very invisible to him. Al is the one that his father has chosen to take over 4 him and then he dies early on in story.
Gino(Maria's father) is a serious old country, and is the most powerful reputed crime boss in the US. He's somewhat generic, at this point, and the last thing I want to do is have him be another echo of Brando's char in "The Godfather" and all the rest of the Brando cookiecutter chars. He needs to be somewhat cliche for the genre, but yet have a colorful flair that's all his own.
Paul(Maria's Lover) is an upperclass sophisticated yuppie. He went to Yale and wants to make a name for himself as a bussiness atty., but at present , even though he's brilliant, is on the staff of the DA's office. A good place, since it's his 1st year out of lawschool and it wouldn't make much of a story with him in a different job. After all where would the passion fueled conflict.
This has been frustrating trying to furthur develop these characters and bring them to a real life. Carlo is unique and quirky and yet these more important characters need to be with out taking away from who they already are.
Have been trying to work with extensive worksheets and char. boigraphies, but they're still flat.
HELP!
Thanx Jen