Feedback on my latest song?

[Denial is bliss]

I wrote it like 5 seconds ago it is a one shot with nothing to complicated more of a vent but what do you think? :Shrug:




You Were My Life




I can’t remember

If you ever meant the world to me

But now that you’re gone

I know you do

I wrapped your love around me like a blanket

and now that your gone I’m freezing cold





CHOURUS

Baby, when I think about you I can’t breathe (I can’t breathe)

When I close my eyes your all that I see (All I see)

There’s no way I’m going to sleep tonight

Because I can’t deal with seeing your face

Right now





With you gone I have no one to talk to

Don’t make me promise

Don’t tell me I can’t

Cut

I don’t know what else to do

Because





CHOURUS

Baby, when I think about you I can’t breathe (I can’t breathe)

When I close my eyes your all that I see (All I see)

There’s no way I’m going to sleep tonight

Because I can’t deal with seeing your face

Right now





I just want to scream, to cry, to forget

But I can’t





CHOURUS

Baby, when I think about you I can’t breathe (I can’t breathe)

When I close my eyes your all that I see (All I see)

There’s no way I’m going to sleep tonight

Because I can’t deal with seeing your face

Right now

(Fade away)

[SLake]

You really had an inspirational burst there!

Sorry for this added comment, but it's only about your spelling, which you might want to check -- it's about not the inspirational lyrics. "You are" abbreviated or shortened is "you're," not "your" and there's a few other problem, not to mention "chorus." Sorry, I'm a just a darned writer. Keep up the great lyrics -- love to hear it being sung!