PDA

View Full Version : Too many commas?


Martydee
03-20-2009, 10:59 PM
There seem to be too many, but which can I leave out?

Because, at that moment, spoken words, for Nicholas, would have been impossible.

RichardB
03-20-2009, 11:01 PM
There seem to be too many, but which can I leave out?

Because, at that moment, spoken words, for Nicholas, would have been impossible.

Because at that moment, spoken words would have been impossible for Nicholas.

Or even,
Because spoken words would have been impossible for Nicholas at that moment.

RobJ
03-20-2009, 11:44 PM
Because spoken words would have been impossible for Nicholas at that moment.

Anna Magdalena
03-21-2009, 12:31 AM
I agree with Richard B's second choice and with Robj. The sentence is perfectly understandable without the commas.

Martydee
03-21-2009, 12:36 AM
Thanks all. Here's to Richard B's second choice.

blacbird
03-21-2009, 01:25 AM
Robj's reconstruction illustrates a major reason for commaitis: mis-ordered clauses. The suggested correction demonstrates one of the best ways to cure it.

caw

RobJ
03-21-2009, 05:46 PM
Sorry, RichardB, I missed your second version when I posted.

Cheers,
Rob

LAWolf
03-22-2009, 04:06 AM
"Because spoken words would have been impossible for Nicholas at that moment."

But now you have a sentence fragment. I'd just leave off the because.

Carole
03-22-2009, 05:53 AM
Yes--I like the RichardB's first example. The fragment issue can be adjusted. Too many commas can make a sentence cumbersome, even when they are used correctly.

frisco
03-22-2009, 07:10 AM
At that moment spoken words would have been impossible for Nicholas.

Just an idea which might not work.