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03-16-2009, 02:14 AM
You've all been so helpful. I've taken everyone's sincere input to heart and finally come up with four paragraphs I think I can be proud of.*
*For those few of you who were frivolous in their responses, just wait until the shoe is on the other foot.
03-16-2009, 03:23 AM
03-16-2009, 05:25 AM
These should each be their own separate chapters. Kind of like in New Moon when there were 4 or 5 blank chapters titled with months, to indicate the passage of time. You could title your blank chapters with these numbers, to indicate meaninglessness.
03-16-2009, 05:35 AM
I'm not convinced it's your best work. After "85643 is the new 734252765?" won such acclaim I'm wondering if you want to settle.
03-16-2009, 06:59 AM
My only remaining question is, do I write this in first person or third person?
Matera the Mad
03-16-2009, 07:59 AM
Verbose. Come on, you know better than to post a first draft.
03-16-2009, 08:06 AM
I love it. It is so inspirational. You have changed my life.
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