Writing romance in YA

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KosseMix

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My alpha readers went over my manuscript and said that the main relationship in it moves too fast into seriousness and needs more "fluffy awkwardness" - which makes sense, as they're 15.

Do you have any suggestions on how to do this?

Examples of books that did a stellar job portraying it for analysis?

I hardly remember my first relationship, when I was 15. Oy. I need to go find that diary I wrote in during the time.
 

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Awkward signs that a guy likes a girl:

- finds any excuse to talk to her or be near her
- gets caught staring at her; looks at her a lot
- starts acting nicer, or different, around her
- agrees with everything she says (puppy-dog symptoms)
- treats her differently than others
- nervousness (nervous laughter, sweaty palms, deep breaths, fidgeting)
- acts immaturely around her (poking, teasing, playful flirting)
- touches her randomly (hugs, hand holding, "accidental" stuff)
- tries to make her laugh or feel better
- tries to make her jealous (flirting with a friend)
- is nicer to or tries to talk to her friends
- tries to act cool around her or impress her
- feels so awful letting her down that he lies
- acts like he's paying attention to a group conversation, but actually stares at her the whole time
- ignores her almost completely (depends on the guy)
- compliments her

Awkward signs a girl likes a guy:

- mostly the same stuff as the guy
- hits him
- acts like a damsel in distress ("I'm cold!")
- plays with her hair, clothes
- flashes smiles
- mind games (haha)
- friends freak out when he's around
- winks at him, blows him a kiss (rofl)
- plays hard to get

Examples of awkwardness between mutually interested youngsters:
- silence ("um, yeah, so") where they could talk fine before
- failed flirting (cutest thing ever)

most of that's stolen from wikiHow. haha. awkward liking is so adorable - definitely get some more in there :)
 
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