Does this sentence make sense?

[SLThomas]

I'm currently butting my head on a sentence.

Which one is better?

1) But I cannot shake a vague feeling of satisfaction of a job well done.

2) But I cannot shake a vague feeling of satisfaction for a job well done.

3) But I cannot shake a vague feeling of satisfaction of a well done job.

4) But I cannot shake a vague feeling of satisfaction for a well done job.


I hesitate between #2 and 4.

Thanks in adv.

[regdog]

I vote #4

[dpaterso]

"a job well done" is a familiar phrase so for me it's between 1) and 2) -- but "of satisfaction of" made my reading eye stumble for just a second -- so I'm voting 2)

...Not that you asked but wording sounds kinda formal or outdated to me -- and I'm having problems understanding why anyone would want to shake such a feeling, or why it would be vague -- but that's probably for another thread. :)

-Derek

[Buddikins]

2.... how bare my response is... sorry

[SLThomas]

[quote=dpaterso;2658817

...Not that you asked but wording sounds kinda formal or outdated to me -- and I'm having problems understanding why anyone would want to shake such a feeling, or why it would be vague -- but that's probably for another thread. :)

-Derek[/quote]


Good!!

That's the feeling I'm looking for...The story is set in the past, so it should feel more formal!

[SLThomas]

Yeah, hence why the reason I asked for help: the double OF in #1 and #3.

Thanks y'all! ;)

[tehuti88]

I would go with number two.

If you choose to go with number four, I'd hyphenate it since "well done" is here an adjective--"But I cannot shake a vague feeling of satisfaction for a well-done job."

[FennelGiraffe]

#2

'job well done' is a common expression

I generally prefer 'satisfaction of', although in a few cases 'satisfaction for <verbing>' works.

[Shamisen]

I would go for #2 as well.

[Sophia]

# 2. Although I keep wanting to replace "But" with "Yet". :)

[SLThomas]

[quote=ElaraSophia;2659788 Although I keep wanting to replace "But" with "Yet". :)[/quote]


Good idea! Thanks!

[Symphony]

I vote No 2. It's quite antiquated/traditional but probably only because it's out of context.

[Jimmyboy1]

The "But" might be better as a "Yet".
One would have satisfaction "of" something, not "for" something.
imho
Jim

[Seaclusion]

#2, but I would also rather have 'yet' in place of 'but'.

Richard

[RJK]

I've heard "for a job well done" about a hundred thousand times in the military. It is a common phrase there, and is a familiar one in the rest of the english speaking world.

[zegota]

None of the above, in my opinion. As others have said, "a job well done" is cliche. You should replace or cut the phrase.

[SLThomas]

I did use #2, although I changed "But" with "Yet".
Maybe during revision I'll change the whole thing... We'll see.

Mods can close this thread, as I got my answer.
thanks for the advice!

S-L

[dpaterso]

Mods, close threads? Unheard of!

-Derek